Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for more than
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27 Jul 2020, 18:29
Hello all,
I just took my first GMAC Practice test this past weekend and I decided to do the AWA last. Can someone please review my AWA? My score on AWA is around a 5 and I just want to make sure if I do the AWA last my ability does not drop too much. Thank you!
Prompt:
“Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for more than 70 years. Although one foreign company has copied the motorcycle and is selling it for less, the company has failed to attract motorcycle X customers—some say because its product lacks the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X. But there must be some other explanation. After all, foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar American-made cars, but they sell at least as well. Also, television advertisements for motorcycle X highlight its durability and sleek lines, not its noisiness, and the ads typically have voice-overs or rock music rather than engine-roar on the sound track.”
Essay:
The author is indicating that the foreign motorcycle is not attracting customers for reasons other than the loud noise made by the engine-roar. Although this may be true, the author justifies his claim by disregarding that the loud noise is a selling factor by comparing the successful sale of quieter foreign cars. In addition, he points out that television advertisements do not highlight the engine-roar of motorcycle X. The author’s claims and conclusion are invalid due to unsubstantiated assumptions and evidence pertaining to the marketing and sale of foreign motorcycle.
Firstly, the author is illogically comparing motorcycles to foreign cars. He is confused because foreign cars are quieter than American-made cars, but sell just as well. The author is isolating the noise of the car as the only important feature needed for it to sell, whereas customers who purchase foreign cars are looking at the design, comfort, and durability. The author is also making the assumption that since people prefer foreign cars that are quieter, they should also be okay buying motorcycles that are quieter. Motorcycles are known for their loud, roaring engine which can play a major part in the image of the motorcycle for the customer. The author makes unsubstantiated claims by invalidating reasons why customers by foreign cars and motorcycle X.
Secondly, the author fails to take into account the authenticity of a product. Motorcycle X has been in business for more than 70 years. It is likely that customers believe that motorcycle X is a superior product because of the company’s long-term experience. If the business also has a loyal customer base, customers are less likely to buy foreign motorcycles that just came out. Additionally, television ads for motorcycle X highlight its’ durability and sleek design instead of noise. This is not enough evidence to invalidate that noise can play a role in purchasing a motorcycle. Even if it does not, it is possible that the foreign motorcycle does not provide the same sleek design or durability as motorcycle X manufactured by a company that has been in the business for over 70 years.
The author points out that there has to be another explanation as to why the foreign motorcycle is not selling. It is possible that there are a plethora of reasons other than the noise that make the foreign motorcycle unattractive. Firstly, even if it is selling for less, is it worth saving money to go to a company that has just started selling motorcycles versus a reputable motorcycle seller. Also, is the design of motorcycle X far superior to the design of the foreign motorcycle. It is also possible that customers care about brand and they consider the foreign motorcycle to be a knock-off. There are many different explanations that the author can explore, but fails to. There is also much more research that needs to be done into the preferences of engine noise when buying motorcycles if the author wants to invalidate that as a buying factor.
Although the author may be correct in pointing out that there are reasons other than the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X that make it attractive, the author makes illogical comparisons and completely disregards that noise can be a significant factor. Without further evidence to support the claims and illogical assumptions made in the article, the author is likely to convince few.