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Hi guys can you please help reviwin this for the awa section... Thanks!

The following appeared in the health section of a magazine on trends and lifestyles:
“People who use the artificial sweetener aspartame are better off consuming sugar, since aspartame can actually contribute to weight gain rather than weight loss. For example, high levels of aspartame have been shown to trigger a craving for food by depleting the brain of a chemical that registers satiety, or the sense of being full. Furthermore, studies suggest that sugars, if consumed after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, actually enhance the body’s ability to burn fat. Consequently, those who drink aspartame-sweetened juices after exercise will also lose this calorie-burning benefit
The argument states it is better to consume sugar than artificial sweetener aspartame because the sweetener contribute to weight gain. Moreover, states that consuming sugar after exercise enhance the body’s ability to burn fat. Finally concludes that people that drink aspartame-sweetener juices after exercise will lose the calorie burning benefit.
Furthermore, there are several assumptions that make the argument flawed. For instance, it states that consuming high levels of the artificial sweetener make people desire to eat more, but it is not clear about what is the exact quantity for causing the cravings for food. Moreover, how many of that quantity is permitted during one day, for example if one person uses all of the sweetener for one coffee probably it would be healthier to use one spoon of sugar that all of the aspartame sweetener.
Likewise, it states that consuming sugar after at least one period of time enhance the body`s ability to burn fat, but it does not specify what king of exercise, it is different running than walking or doing yoga, the amount of calories burn in one sport differ substantially from the others. Moreover, the study where sugar contribute to fat burning could be for high level athletes where the consumption of calories is greater than a person than exercise twice a week.
Additionally, the argument concludes that drinking aspartame juices after exercise will lose the benefit of consuming sugar after 45 minutes of exercise. However, in the magazine article there is no way to know the difference in the aspartame juices and the original aspartame sweetener, therefor the original sweetener could have or not the same benefit as sugar does after exercise.
As a conclusion, the article states that is better to consume sugar than the aspartame sweetener, but on another point of view with the appropriate consumption of the sweetener could be better to eat the aspartame than sugar.

axon321 · Answer

This is a great guide. Thank you  chineseburned .
The attachment is very helpful.

plaverbach · Answer

Memorizing the   Chineseburnt AWA template   with voice to text!

1. Enter here :  https://www.naturalreaders.com/online/ 
 2. Paste this text:  
The argument claims that something. Stated this way the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated, and reveals examples of leap of faith and poor reasoning. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.

First, the argument readily assumes that something. This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way. For example, something. The argument could be much clearer if it explicitly stated that something.

Second, the argument claims that something. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between something and something. To illustrate something. While something. If the argument had provided evidence that something, then the argument would have been a lot more convincing.

Finally something. Question 1. Question 2. Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more to a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to access the merits of a certain situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.

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aygulismayilova · Answer

Please rate my essay, I have exam in a week. Thanks  GMATNinja   JoshKnewton   KapTeacherEli

The following appeared in a speech delivered by a member of the city council:
“Twenty years ago, only half of the students who graduated from Einstein High School went on to attend a college or
university. Today, two–thirds of the students who graduate from Einstein do so. Clearly, Einstein has improved its
educational effectiveness over the past two decades. This improvement has occurred despite the fact that the
school’s funding, when adjusted for inflation, is about the same as it was 20 years ago. Therefore, we do not need to
make any substantial increase in the school’s funding at this time.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

The argument claims that Einstein High School does not need to make any substantial increase in the school`s funding since it has improved its educational effectiveness over the last 20 years with relatively same amount of funding. The conclusion of the argument is based on the premise that the proportion of Einstein High Schools graduates, who went on to attend college or university increased over the past 2 decades. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that funding is the only factor affecting the educational effectiveness and fails to mention other factors, which could change the decision of graduates about their after graduation plans. Students might be forced to pursue higher education because of the later trends in labor market or job requirements.
Second, the argument could have been much clearer if the author provided information on the recent changes of some other high schools. There might be a general factor, which affects the plans of all students nationwide. In fact, it is not at all clear whether Einstein High School is the only school experiencing this situation.
Finally, the argument fails to mention data on the basis of which it could be evaluated, namely the number of graduates today and 20 years ago. If the number of students decreased significantly over the period, then the funding per student increased. This change may lead improvements in the educational effectiveness.
In conclusion, without this information the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.

Harsh2206 · Answer

Can someone please share a template for essays where you actually agree with what the author is trying to argue about?

CircuitBHAI · Answer

Is it just me or Anyone else finds parallelism issue in this line???

generis   GMATNinja

bb · Answer

Good catch but not critical on AWA. You can be grammatical and perfect but it hardly matters in a 20-min essay. You can say "flawed" sure. There you go

But hardly worth the bits it is written on. Don't worry about being parallel. You have bigger things to flush out

finnlark · Answer

I sat for the in-person GMAT last Saturday. Looked at your template and your written example the week leading up to my exam. Ended up at a 6.0. Amazing template and it still holds up 13 years since the OP.

Perhaps it did help that my prompt was relatively longer than some of the other prompts I saw listed on the MBA website. More info to dissect and write about. Either way thanks so much  chineseburned .

bb · Answer

Thanks for the feedback from the test center! AWA has not changed in many years! (Used to be 2 essays a long time ago and now it is just 1 but still the same concept and same grading).

But yes, this post is legendary!

Hope you got a great score!
BB

Phil7 · Answer

First GMAT exam tomorrow- haven't spent time on AWA yet, therefore my question:

Is a test taker allowed to use this template word by word or would that be viewed as plagiarizm?
Has anyone used this template with the exact same wording and could share their experience?

Is there any form of plagiarizm check on the GMAT when it comes to the AWA section?

Thank you

Eeni · Answer

This is very helpful for folks new to GMAT. Thanks! Cheers!

st19931219 · Answer

I had completely forgotten that the enhanced version also had the essay. It was the night before the exam that I came across this thread in a fit of panic. I very roughly looked at the overall structure, and I am glad to report I scored a perfect 6.0 on the AWA. Thank you so much

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harshtandel838 · Answer

Thank you, I got 5.0 on AWA.

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bb · Answer

Wow. Awesome. 
PS. It really does just take a day 😎👍❤️

JB05 · Answer

Could using this template word-for-word cause any plagiarism/cheating issues?

bb · Answer

I am sure many have used it almost to that extent and it has not caused any issues. I don’t think it’s checked for similarity to other essays since are you are given a choice of a random essay.

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kaladin123 · Answer

I can personally attest to the efficacy of the template.

I used it in both of my attempts to score a 6.0. Also, since the prompts are so diverse, it's unlikely that what you write on test-day would match some other test taker's essay. The essays wouldn't probably match if you were to write from the same prompt again on another day.

viphaneev · Answer

Thanks for the post.
Here, I have applied your structure to the essay. 
Appreciate any feedback and comments.

The rating system for electronic games is similar to the movie rating system in that it provides consumers with a quick reference so that they can determine if the subject matter and contents are appropriate. This electronic game rating system is not working because it is self-regulated and the fines for violating the rating system are nominal. As a result, an independent body should oversee the game industry and companies that knowingly violate the rating system should be prohibited from releasing a game for two years."

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's logic and analyze the argument's underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the argument's conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or what changes would make the argument more logically sound.

The argument claims that the rating system for electronic games is an unreliable measure as it is self-regulated and the punishment for wrongful doing is unsubstantiated. The author asked for an independent body to oversee the industry, specifically its rating system, and implement a heavier punishment in case of any wrongdoing. Stated in this way, the argument doesn’t clearly demonstrate enough evidence for the claim and doesn’t clearly elaborate on the terminology of self-regulation. For these reasons, the conclusion of the argument is rather weak and unconvincing.

To begin with, the argument doesn’t clarify the definition of self-regulation, making it hard to know which case would be defined as self-regulated and which would not. To illustrate this, there is a significant difference between 5% fake rating and 90% fake rating. Thus, if it was well-defined in the argument, it would be clear to settle what % of fake rating would account for the wrongdoing and should be regulated and punished.

Second, the argument readily assumes that the rating system is self-regulated without any evidence to support the case. Given the open nature of the rating system where anyone is allowed to feedback. Customers can rate only after they have purchased or used the product. The rating, then, averages the total result of all the people who have tried the product. Clearly, given a small group of users, the rating for a certain game might seem skewed or regulated toward a certain result but as the number of users increases, the rating should shift toward public opinion. The argument could have been more well-supported if it explicitly illustrates a generic case where the system is being subjectively regulated.

Finally, without a clearly defined concentration of what constitutes self-regulated rating, how could any independent regulators validate the suit for or against the claim? If the fake rating doesn’t account much for the overall rating, it wouldn’t affect the total rating as much and wouldn’t be as much detrimental to the product to deserve one standard punishment. With a lack of evidence to support the claim, wouldn’t a severe punishment prohibit game release for 2 years unnecessarily hurt the gaming industry as a whole? Therefore, without, convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is not well-defined and not well-supported rather a logically sound one.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above reasons and, therefore, unconvincing. In order to assess the merits of a proposal, the situation should be well-defined and supported by a number of relevant pieces of evidence. If not, the argument remains unsubstantiated and will be open to controversy.

Thanks in advance

kaladin123 · Answer

There are two free e-checkers that I regularly use to evaluate my AWAs. They don't use the official GMAT algorithm, but they're good enough. 
 https://www.mbacrystalball.com/blog/2012/12/24/gmat-awa-sample-essays-testing/ 
 https://www.gmatawa.com/

viphaneev · Answer

kaladin123  
Thank you

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