Please rate my essay! Test on the 16th

Dear everyone!
I have just wrote my first essay on the integrated task. The problem is extracted from the cambridge book. Please feel free to make any comments/rate my essay! I really appreciate your opinion and certainly will reward it with kudos!

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Marcel


On the one hand, the reading passage states that reward schemes tied to performance of employees increases their productivity and bases its argumentation on management studies. On the other hand, the professor critically examines the theory of reward schemes tied to compensation and casts serious doubts on its validity.
First of all, in the reading passage scholars explain that human beings are like bodies demanding external motivation and they point out that reward schemes fit into this motivation. In contrary, the professor argues that employees do not like just being paid for working hard, but rather want recognition and respect for their efforts. Hence, he casts doubt on the evidence exhibited by the passage. As a result, respect is a better external motivation than reward schemes.
Secondly, the article pushes the idea forth that reward schemes enhance the employees’ attitude, motivation and productivity. However, the speaker in the lecture contradicts the idea by explaining that employees rather feel punished by reward schemes. They often expect a certain amount of bonus, but if the actual bonus does not meet their expectations, they feel manipulated. Consequently, we can argue that indeed reward schemes worsen employees’ attitudes and loyalty towards their firms.
Finally, and most importantly, the text concludes that the biggest rewards go to the best employees. However, the professor contradicts this by mentioning that problems are simply not discussed with supervisors due to performance based reward schemes. Usually, employees working in teams engage in conversations with supervisors about problems they might encounter. However, reward schemes encourage employees to hide these problems. Therefore, we can fairly say that reward schemes decrease productivity.
In summary, the professor casts doubts on the main standpoint of the passage. We can safely assume that reward schemes are indeed counter productive. Therefore, the passage fails to compare theory with practice.