The common notion that workers are generally apathetic about managemen

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The following appeared in the editorial section of a corporate newsletter:
“The common notion that workers are generally apathetic about management issues is false, or at least outdated: a
recently published survey indicates that 79 percent of the nearly 1,200 workers who responded to survey
questionnaires expressed a high level of interest in the topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits
programs.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

Argument refutes a common notion about workers' apathy towards management issues by citing a survey undertaken by 1200 workers. However, argument fails to provide any information about key factors that may help in evaluating the soundness of the argument. The line of reasoning on which argument based its conclusion is weak for reasons discussed further.

First, argument's conclusion is based on the survey to which 1200 workers responded. Argument does not provide any information about the size of total workforce of the company or the percentage of employees participated in the survey. It might be possible that these 1200 workers represent only 10% of total workforce, and thus conclusion drawn in the argument no longer holds for an entire corporation. Moreover, such low participation rate in a survey shows that employees are actually indifferent to management efforts, and proposes diametrically opposite conclusion to that mentioned in the argument.

Second, even if 1200 workers are representative of whole workforce, then also these 79% expressed interest in topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits -topics whose results will have direct impact on employees. Argument provides no information about responses of employees to other issues in the questionnaire. It could be possible that employees might not have shown any interest in other issues- issues related to compliance, licensing, quality control etc.-which are of importance to management but do not effect employees directly.

Third, to base an argument on a survey whose sanctity is not fully known is not correct. We don't know whether responses of workers were anonymous or not, whether workers were free to response as they like or not, etc. Since these factors can manipulate the result of any survey, these are important to consider in order to determine the force of evidence cited. Also, argument is wrong in deducing a general conclusion on the basis of a survey which may be applicable to only one corporation. In actual conditions, degree to which workers are apathetic to management issues may vary from corporation to corporation and we need results of survey from large number of corporations in order to draw any general conclusion.

In summary, the argument is flawed and fails to make a convincing case for its conclusion. Hence, the common notion that workers are apathetic about management issues may still be valid.