Happy to help! Let me answer your questions one at a time.
hamidmax wrote:
1- one of
Manhattan books regarding to AWA & integrated reasoning suggests writing as much as we can, in other words, the book recommends making wordy and lengthy sentences (ex: more than 24 words per sentence) , however , you urged me to write shorter. would you please elaborate more. I am not an English speaker, as a result I am not able to convey and express my meaning well and I have to write more in order to say my opinion in a better way.
Any good writing will vary sentence length. So I wouldn't advocate that you write all short sentences or all long sentences. You need to demonstrate your ability to deal with lengthy ideas in a sentence, but you need to balance this with shorter sentences that are direct and poignant. If you want to write longer sentences, aim to form compound-complex sentences. You need to build these as individual units and then combine them together in a sentence.
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Manhattan books are generally good and give sound advice. Ultimately, and unfortunately, essays that are longer receive a higher score. That is just the way it works out. So don't feel like you have to have a lot of long sentences. Just aim to write as much as you can in short and long sentences.
hamidmax wrote:
2- the construction "citing.... the argument claims that...." was not created by myself, I saw it from some samples, although I agree with you that it is somehow awkward. I will never write it in that way. and for last parts of my writing I did not rush to finish it , in fact, I did not know what I had to write for conclusion. Later, I saw some examples and now I know how to finish it. My questions is: will I get a 4 score,if instead of just asking some questions in my forth paragraph, I explain another flaw and support my idea? I mean you gave me score 3 and I want to know what may major problem is.
There is nothing wrong with that format: "citing.... the argument claims that...." You can use this just don't pack it so full of information to make it awkward. For example,
"Citing the evidence from the color film producing industry, the argument claims that Olympic Foods can anticipate a decrease its processing costs."
Yes, you should discuss another flaw or pose one question and spend the entire paragraph answering the question. This would be an effective use of your time at the end. I gave you a 3 because the last part of your essay was not as strong as the beginning, your committed some grammatical errors, and your phrasing was awkward and cumbersome at times. If you can correct these issues, you can achieve a 4.
hamidmax wrote:
3- I live in an underdeveloped country and here we have no class for GMAT preparation and we also have no GMAT test center, so I have to travel another country to take the exam. So finding study materials is substantially difficult to me and I have nobody to give him or her to assess my writing. Is there a way I send you my writings ( once per week) and you evaluate them? I know how busy you are but since I`ll take the exam in next 3 weeks, I do not know what I have to do.
Unfortunately, I can't make any promises, but feel free to send me an essay once a week and I'll try to send you feedback. I understand how hard it can be to practice the writing section in some places in the world. If you don't mind me asking, what question do you live in?
I spent a lot of time working with students from many different countries helping them prepare for the GMAT and GRE. So, I know how difficult the writing portion of the test can be. So just send me a message with the prompt and the essay and I will try to find time to at least send you a little feedback.
I hope that I have been able to help!
Again, let me know if I can make anything more clear.
Kevin
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