Events & Promotions
|
|
GMAT Club Daily Prep
Thank you for using the timer - this advanced tool can estimate your performance and suggest more practice questions. We have subscribed you to Daily Prep Questions via email.
Customized
for You
Track
Your Progress
Practice
Pays
Not interested in getting valuable practice questions and articles delivered to your email? No problem, unsubscribe here.
Nov 2007:30 AM PST
-08:30 AM PST
Learn what truly sets the UC Riverside MBA apart and how it helps in your professional growth
Nov 2211:00 AM IST
-01:00 PM IST
Do RC/MSR passages scare you? e-GMAT is conducting a masterclass to help you learn – Learn effective reading strategies Tackle difficult RC & MSR with confidence Excel in timed test environment- Nov 23
11:00 AM IST
-01:00 PM IST
Attend this free GMAT Algebra Webinar and learn how to master the most challenging Inequalities and Absolute Value problems with ease. 
Nov 2510:00 AM EST
-11:00 AM EST
Prefer video-based learning? The Target Test Prep OnDemand course is a one-of-a-kind video masterclass featuring 400 hours of lecture-style teaching by Scott Woodbury-Stewart, founder of Target Test Prep and one of the most accomplished GMAT instructors.
02 May 2006, 23:59
Kudos
Bookmarks
Guys I typed this in 20 mins.. please give me some feedback.. can i sleep assured? atleast a 4? I appreciate ALL YOUR HELLLLLLLLLPPPPPPPPPPPP
Any tips will benefit me.. I know this is too late.. but I never concentrated on awa.. i typed in around 4-5 essays before.. thats it..
The following appeared in a speech delivered by a member of the city council.
“Twenty years ago, only half of the students who graduated from Einstein High School went on to attend a college or university. Today, two thirds of the students who graduate from Einstein do so. Clearly, Einstein has improved its educational effectiveness over the past two decades. This improvement has occurred despite the fact that the school’s funding, when adjusted for inflation, is about the same as it was twenty years ago. Therefore, we do not need to make any substantial increase in the school’s funding at this time.â€
Any tips will benefit me.. I know this is too late.. but I never concentrated on awa.. i typed in around 4-5 essays before.. thats it..
The following appeared in a speech delivered by a member of the city council.
“Twenty years ago, only half of the students who graduated from Einstein High School went on to attend a college or university. Today, two thirds of the students who graduate from Einstein do so. Clearly, Einstein has improved its educational effectiveness over the past two decades. This improvement has occurred despite the fact that the school’s funding, when adjusted for inflation, is about the same as it was twenty years ago. Therefore, we do not need to make any substantial increase in the school’s funding at this time.â€
Archived Topic
Hi there,
This topic has been closed and archived due to inactivity or violation of community quality standards. No more replies are possible here.
Where to now? Join ongoing discussions on thousands of quality questions in our Verbal Questions Forum
Still interested in this question? Check out the "Best Topics" block below for a better discussion on this exact question, as well as several more related questions.
Thank you for understanding, and happy exploring!
03 May 2006, 02:09
Kudos
Bookmarks
I am not an expert, however... 
I find several places where you could improve...
First of all, you can design a default starting paragraph for your essay... Currently your starting paragraph has no link with the second one.... i would do the last sentence of the first paragraph something like this: I find the authors argument not convincing due to the following reasons....
Then start the second paragraph with: Firstly, ........
The other thing which cought my eye is that you like to repeat your stated arguments again and again.... especially in the second paragraph.... You should not do that, instead you could include somekind of the example which would clearly show the weakness of the argument.... You can repeat your ideas in the conclusion only.... (that is my view)
Some paragraphs seem to me not developed enough... Especially the one where you ask many questions, thus you should do some kind of the mini-conclusion on each of the paragraphs and not to end it with the question mark....
Thus for me, your mistakes are the following:
1) No standardised introduction to the essay is developed ....
2) No link between paragraphs
3) Repeating your arguments in the same paragraph
4) Some paragraphs are not necessary....
This is my subjective view...
I find several places where you could improve...
First of all, you can design a default starting paragraph for your essay... Currently your starting paragraph has no link with the second one.... i would do the last sentence of the first paragraph something like this: I find the authors argument not convincing due to the following reasons....
Then start the second paragraph with: Firstly, ........
The other thing which cought my eye is that you like to repeat your stated arguments again and again....
especially in the second paragraph.... You should not do that, instead you could include somekind of the example which would clearly show the weakness of the argument.... You can repeat your ideas in the conclusion only.... (that is my view)
Some paragraphs seem to me not developed enough... Especially the one where you ask many questions, thus you should do some kind of the mini-conclusion on each of the paragraphs and not to end it with the question mark....
Thus for me, your mistakes are the following:
1) No standardised introduction to the essay is developed ....
2) No link between paragraphs
3) Repeating your arguments in the same paragraph
4) Some paragraphs are not necessary....
This is my subjective view...
03 May 2006, 08:58
Kudos
Bookmarks
thanks a lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i will memorise the princeton reviews template...
so how much would u rate this? is this <= 4?
i will memorise the princeton reviews template...
so how much would u rate this? is this <= 4?
