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# Critique my cover letter

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18 Jul 2012, 20:32
Need some help in this as this is my first time writing one. Any comments will be greatly appreciated.

19 July 2012

RE: Financial Analyst Opportunity

Dear Mr. Peter,

I hope you will consider me for the position of financial analyst, as advertised in The News Times. You mentioned in your advert a need for strong analytical skills, and with my education and work experience I felt that I was well placed for the role.

I am currently pursuing a part time Master of Science in Applied Finance in Ocean University. In additional, I have passed CFA Level 3 and FRM level 2. These educations have given me a solid understanding of the financial markets. I have been proven to be an analytical person with a GMAT score of 750 (98th percentile). My work experience of teaching and managing a class has sharpened my communication skills and relationship-management skills.

If you would like to talk with me or schedule an interview, please call me at 555-555-1212. Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,

Mark Bear

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16 Sep 2012, 23:34
I might be a bit late....first line is not sharp enough, consider changing it. I am not too sure if 'educations' would be the correct word, double check it

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