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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
A teacher’s ability to relate well with students is more important than excellent knowledge of the subject being taught.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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In education field teacher is the important factor to succeed or to gain a great variety of knowledge.There are various qualities
of a every individual teacher,like one can have a profound knowledge on the other hand,one can have expressive qualities or
teaching qualities with respect to students.I think a teacher who can understand and deliver the knowledge by relating to
students is the key aspect in the education field.
Firstly,If a teacher can express the knowledge very well and if consequently the students are capable to understand the tea-
cher's thoughts and opinions then knowlegde of teacher is not a barrier,Although the knowledge is very important in terms of
teaching but having the knowlegde and not able to express or teach to students by involving with them,then Its a less important
factor.For instance,Suppose a person has a profound knowledge about something and he starts to teach the students by the
orthodox method "BLACKBOARD and CHALK" then some students might understand it well but,some students might need some special
examples to understand the fact.On the other hand a teacher having an adequate amount of knowledge but he has great expressive
ideas and tactics to teach the students,He might use visual aids or he might do something which can be easily adapted by the
students.
Moreover,a teacher who is great with mixing up with students,can know the student on the personal level and by this he can
know the strengths or weaknesses of the students.However,other teacher might miss something about the students means if
his teaching is not effective for some of the students,he will never understand the problem of a particular student.On the-
other hand,teacher with social skills will easily spot these problems and eventually try to help them with their problems.
In Conclusion, I can say that a teacher who is great with involving or relating with students is more important than a teacher
who has got excellent knowledge.

I think it's not bad. My advice is to try to use smaller sentences. Sometimes it's hard to follow your ideas.