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24 Sep 2018, 09:06
The author of article presents a causation argument, stating that because of poor nutrients which is ultimate result of the lack of government control over the quality of low priced foods, the major cases of adult diabetes are increasing in course of past decade. The author is assuming that the government is guilty for this increasing trend and only by emphasizing the food manufacturers to add more vitamin and minerals, government could reduce the rate of adult diabetes. The presented arguments seems fallacious and ill-convincing on myriad reasoning grounds. The author has taken a leap to reach conclusion without considering other possible factors of the rising trend of number of cases of diabetes.
Firstly, the author assumes that major increase in new cases of adult onset diabetes is due to only poor nutrients.The author has not considered other factors such as food habits or pattern, lifestyle and other diseases which could develop diabetes could be the cause of diabetes. The diabetes could be hereditary issue with many families.The increasing acquaintance of diabetes in families can also be the cause of reporting of new cases. Without clarifying aforementioned assumption, it would be unconscionable to blame poor nutrients for this rising trend.
Secondly, the author argues that poor nutrient is due to the lack of government control over quality of food available at low prices. The author has not defined the measurement of food quality in quantitative terms of nutrients and without it what is poor nutrients and what is rich nutrients could not be classified. Moreover, if the new cases admitted assert either that low price food are not consumed significantly by population or that high priced foods which have sufficient nutrients are out of reach of population, the government control over food will not impact the number of diabetes cases indirectly.
The author claims that by emphasizing the food manufactures to add more vitamins and minerals in their products, government could play vital role in reducing the rate of adult onset diabetes. The addition of more vitamins and minerals will add cost to products, consequently people will be more reluctant to buy those products and contract diabetes at higher rate. Though the food manufacturers balance the vitamin and minerals in their product under the stringent monitoring of government, the products reach to consumers after a long time when their quality degrades over a while. Therefore, the delivery time of the product from manufacturer to end user is also necessary to know whether government tight control will work to reduce the number of diabetes victims by maintaining the quality of foods.
In sum, the author's blame on government for rising trend of diabetes is unsubstantial without finding the factors impacting the rising number of cases of diabetes and elucidating the details asked earlier in this analysis. The argument is espoused by providing the extent of government role in quality of food available in market, quantifying the nutrients, defining the threshold level of vitamins and minerals in food to avert diabetes and giving nutrient details of food consumed by people.