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In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them.

A. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans' creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans' creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them
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Hi, there! I'm happy to help with this.

Original sentence: In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them.

First of all, notice the idiom with the verb "to expend." When I expend my energies, with the intended result of giving my energy to X, we say that "I expend my energies on X", not "I expend my energies for X." That eliminates answer choice A.

Notice also, what the original sentence is trying to do is construct a valid parallel structure. The "local artisan's creative energy" went to two places: (a) "creation of Buddha images", and (b) the work they did constructing & decorating temples. The correct sentence should have a valid parallel structure between those two elements. This is another flaw of answer (A) --- "the creation" vs. "they constructed and decorated". Not parallel.

Answer (C) repeats that problem: "the creation" vs. "constructing and decorating". Not parallel.

Answer (E) repeats that problem: "the creating" vs. "construction and decoration". Not parallel.

That narrows the choice down to (B) vs. (D).

Notice that (D) is very wordy; it has an indirect inactive structure (from "artisans expended energy on X", active, to "X accounted for artisans energy", passive and weak).

(B) gets the idiom ("expended on") correct; it gets the parallel structure correct; and it's a direct & active formulation of the information. Yeah! This is our best choice.

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B. much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy [color=darkblue]was expended on the creation[/color] of Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined

~~it has to be B~~~

A. much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them

C. much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined should be construction

D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them is this parallel? Obviously not

E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them that part doesn't fit
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Yes, the phrase "in which they are enshrined" is 100% grammatically correct. This is a properly constructed subordinate clause. Subordinate clauses (a.k.a dependent clause) are a HUGE topic on GMAT --- I would suggest consulting whatever review materials you are using.

Very briefly, if this clause were a stand-by-itself independent clause, it would be "they are enshrined in the temples."

Now, consider the ending of the last big sentence, with this piece as a separate sentence.

In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples. They [the Buddha images] are enshrined in the temples.

That's very wordy, which is why folks use subordinate clauses. The rule is:
(a) find the word that will be the anchor, the referent, in the big sentence. Here, that word is "temples."
(b) replace that word in the smaller second sentence with "which": "They were enshrined in which."
(c) Now put the "which" and anything attached to it (here, the preposition "in") at the very beginning of the clause, so it's right next to the anchor word in the original sentence:

In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined.

Does that make sense? Again, if you are unfamiliar with the the idea of a subordinate or dependent clause in a sentence, then I strongly recommend carefully reading any GMAT review materials you have on the subject.

Here's a similar GMAT SC practice question, just for more practice.

http://gmat.magoosh.com/questions/1126

The question on at this link should be followed by a video explanation of the answer.

I hope that helps.

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I have chosen B as the answer:

A. This answer choice breaks the parallelism requirement. Also, what is the purpose of "when" as a relative pronoun here? It doesn't seem to refer to any time or date.

The answer should be along the lines of:

energy was expended on:
-the creation
-the construction
-the decoration

B. This sentence clearly describes the 3 elements that artisan's spend energy on.

C. Again, this answer choice breaks the parallelism requirement. The word "constructing" is wrong here.

D. We want 3 elements that describe what the artisan's spent their energy on. In this case, it splits the "image creation" from the other 2 elements: "constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them." Also, I noticed that after the comma and coordinating conjunction, and, the words do not form an independent clause. This is incorrect because 2 independent clauses should sandwich a comma and a coordinating conjunction. As a result, this sentence is also a fragment.

E. Although I could not find any grammatical errors with this one, the meaning was very confusing. It sounds like "the creation...accounted for...creative energy...as well as construction and decoration." This did not make sense to me at all, so I felt this answer was incorrect.
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Can you explain Choice E ? I thought 'for much of' and 'construction and decoration of' are parallel. ..

Here's the original prompt with choice (E)
In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them.
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

Let's plug in choice (E) and look at the sentence:
In ancient Thailand, the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them
Superficially, the terms "creative energy" and "construction and decoration" are all nouns, so they could be grammatically parallel. The problem is: they are not logically parallel.

Consider the overall structure:

X accounted for Y as well as Z

means

X accounted for Y
and, separately, X accounted for Z

Consider that here:
the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy
and, separately,
the creating of Buddha images accounted for the construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

That's not the meaning the original sentence is trying to express. What is it trying to say is that ----
the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy
and, separately,
the construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy

We are trying to create a parallelism between the three types of work, each of which occupied the creative energy of the artisans. Those three types of work were
(a) the creating of Buddha images
(b) the construction of the temples
(c) the decoration of the temples

Logically, those three need to be in parallel, and they are not in (E). It's not enough to have superficial grammatical parallelism if that parallelism does not reflect the deeper logic of the situation. Grammar and logic must always point to the same conclusions.

You may find this blog germane:
http://magoosh.com/gmat/2012/gmat-gramm ... n-english/

Does all this make sense? Please let me know if you have any more questions.

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seems new question......... source?

E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them
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B for me.

E and D don't have the intended meaning so they are wrong. C is not parallel. And A replaces on with for, so using an incorrect idiom. I think B is the best.
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Good job guys. OA is B indeed.

VC019 gave a nice explanation. It is a ||ism question.
much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended on .....
and on construction and decoration of ....
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In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them.

A. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them
B. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined
C. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them
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In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.

A. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them

B. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined

C. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which
they were enshrined

D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative
energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them

E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative
energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them

can someone help me in explain what "that" refers in option E and what 'which" refers to in option B
and please explain why you eliminate each options!

This is a relatively easy one. Look for a parallelism error. The parallelism should be between 'creation' and 'construction'. Only B satisfies the criteria.
The 'that' in E is trying to describe something which is not necessary. In other words, even if i finish the sentence with 'they constructed the temples.' it would suffice..On the other hand the 'which' in B is properly used as whatever follows 'which' is not essential.
Remember, 'that' is used for essential clauses. 'Which' is for non-essential clauses.
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In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the
creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them.

A. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended for the creation of
Buddha images
and when they constructed and decorated the temples that
enshrined them
Parallelism error
"expended on" is right idiom
"that .." modifies temples and " they" and" them" also has reference problem bcz they must refers to artisans however, artisans are in possessive form. pronouns should refer to NOUNs.

B. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images
and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they
were enshrined - correct choice
"in which" clearly refers to temples and "they" refers to "Buddha images" the sentence implies that temples that Buddha images were enshrined.
llism error rectified

C. much of the local artisans’ creative energy was expended on the creation of
Buddha images
as well as constructing and decoration of the templesin which
they were enshrined
again llism error.

D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative
energy
, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
distort meaning bcz using "accounted for"
"temples enshrining them" enshrining is ing-verb modifier w/o (,) therefore modifies the preceding noun "temples"

E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisans’ creative
energy
as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them
llism error.
distort meaning bcz using "accounted for"

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Hi everybody,

I am struggling with the correct answer choice B, which I mistakenly crossed off when doing this problem. From MGMAT SC, I learned that you must not put simple gerunds (construction and decoration) and complex gerunds (THE creation) into a parallel construction? Has anybody an explanation?

Thanks!

Dear nanasgis,
I'm happy to respond. With all due respect, my friend, I think you are misunderstanding what a gerund is. A gerund, very specifically, is a verb form, the "-ing" form of a verb. See:
http://magoosh.com/gmat/2012/gmat-gramm ... d-phrases/
creating
constructing
decorating

Those are gerunds. What MGMAT says about these is perfectly true --- with an article (a, an, the), one becomes a "complex gerund" which could be in parallel with an ordinary noun. Furthermore, we wouldn't put a simple gerund in parallel with a complex gerund. That't the rule for gerunds.

You seem to be confusing all action nouns with gerunds. Anything that ends with "-tion" is a noun. Nouns and gerunds are mutually exclusive. A gerund is a verb-form that is taking the role of a noun, but it is very different from a bonafide noun. Many "-tion" nouns are action words, but those are all nouns: they are NOT gerunds.
creation
construction
decoration

Those are nouns, not gerunds. The rules for gerunds (simple vs. complex) are 100% irrelevant to nouns. We are perfectly able to put any noun in parallel with any other noun. The logic & meaning would provide constraints to what would make a legitimate parallel structure, but the presence or absence of articles doesn't matter in the least. Option (B) does not contain a single gerund, so any rules governing different types of gerunds is 100% irrelevant to option (B).

Does all this make sense, my friend?
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B too

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Straight B.
..... much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended on .....
and on ....
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In ancient Thailand, much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them.

A. much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended for the creation of Buddha images and when they constructed and decorated the temples that enshrined them
B. much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images and on construction and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined
C. much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy was expended on the creation of Buddha images as well as constructing and decoration of the temples in which they were enshrined
D. creating images of Buddha accounted for much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy, and also constructing and decorating the temples enshrining them
E. the creating of Buddha images accounted for much of the local artisansâ€™ creative energy as well as construction and decoration of the temples that enshrined them
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16 Jan 2006, 15:23
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i m kinda inclined towards E though..

"the creating of Buddha's images accounted for"
vs
"the creation of Buddha's images accounted for"

I guess the first one is not right

I would go with B
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16 Jan 2006, 20:54
andy_gr8 wrote:
bewakoof wrote:
i m kinda inclined towards E though..

"the creating of Buddha's images accounted for"
vs
"the creation of Buddha's images accounted for"

I guess the first one is not right

I would go with B

yes u r right.. b it is..i dont even know wat i was thinking
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