AWA Score: 5 out of 6
Coherence and connectivity: 3.5/5
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Paragraph structure and formation: 4.5/5
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Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5
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Prompt:
The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Response:
The argument presented here claims that modifying the shower heads to restrict the water flow throughout the twelve buildings in SunnySide towers will increase profits, as these modification has been tried in first three buildings and the manager is sure about its positive results though water usage is not available for comparison. However the argument is incomplete and cannot be solidly reasonable until some clarifications are made.
One of the underlying assumption is that restricting the flow of water through showerheads is the only way to conserve water and eventually money. The author fails to take into account other sources via which more water is being used like Air conditioning or via normal taps. What if the apartment has a swimming pool, where water needs to be changed frequently. What if there was a connection gap with some of the pipes across the building due to which there is a water leak that might have went undetected. In order to bolster the argument, author needs to provide more information about the building itself, like swimming pool presence, and residents about how much water is used in what section of the household. Also the author needs to be cognisant about any kind of water leaks across the apartment.
Secondly, the argument mentions that actual readings of water usage before and after adjustment for the first three buildings, are not available and yet the manager is confident about considerable savings. For instance, water usage was actually high in kitchen taps rather than the showerheads for the tested apartments while the rest of the apartments usage of water was high in some home appliances like washing machine. In this case, the study produces biased results and this plan fails to acknowledge the problem. In order to strengthen the argument, author needs to prove that the all the twelve buildings are exactly same, the kind of usage of water is highest in showerheads and no other factors play any kind of role.
The third assumption that author proceeds with is profits will increase dramatically, once water flow is restricted throughout all the twelve buildings. The author fails to take into consideration the other factors that will effect the profit, like may be the water price might increase or maybe people might leave the apartments due to controlled water flow issue, as people are complaining about the low pressure.So, the author here needs to throw light on information about the prices of water, or rather come up with statistical report about how much and were the money is being spent and also record the number of people leaving the apartment.
Lastly, given that we do not know answers to a lot of questions, it is unresonable to overthrow any kind of conclusion.