Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees

Question

The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper:

"Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from the Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.
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The argument states that the difficult times in obtaining teaching jobs for graduates will be resolved in the coming decade with an increase number of people reaching college age. This conclusion is both a leap of faith as well as is based on flawed assumptions. Also, the argument fails to discuss several key factors required to make such an inference.

Firstly, an increased number of people reaching college age does not necessarily mean they will enroll for a course available in Waymarsh University. Moreover, there is no information provided regarding the interests and priorities of people reaching college age such as their educational preference, their intent to work in teaching profession post their graduation. For example, the new generation of graduates may be interested in entrepreneurship instead of working in teaching profession. If that is the case, the conclusion of job market improvement for specialty academic teaching will have no bearing. Also, with the advent of internet technologies, it is a possibility that degree seekers may resort to internet learning as against college education. Since the argument does not discuss any of these factors, there is a leap of faith between the premises and the associated conclusion.

Secondly, the argument claims that graduates are unable to find jobs while teaching their academic specialties at the college level. However, the conclusion talks about the next generation of students aspiring for college-level teaching positions. Clearly, there is a gap between what the first premise states and what is concluded. In fact, if the intent of the first premise is to pick a subset of graduates who are currently teaching at college level and aspiring for other jobs, then with the job market improvement and an increased number of students, there will be an increase in the number of teaching positions.

Finally, there is no statistics provided in the argument to substantiate the improved job market in the next decade. From the premises, it cannot be determined if there is acute shortage of teaching jobs in specific academic fields and how the demand fares against the supply. Also, there is no discussion on the intake student capacity for Waymarsh university. If the intake in student capacity is not bound to increase, there will not be an increased demand for teaching jobs.

In summary, the conclusion of a dramatic improvement in the job market over the next decade fails to consider several key factors such as the ones discussed above along with making far-fetched assumptions. Hence the argument is flawed and will not serve its intended purpose as such. The argument can be strengthened by discussing the factors mentioned above.

mbaaspirant80 · Answer

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   AWA Score: 5 out of 6!

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sumaiyabss · Answer

Please review my essay and give a score

The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper:
"Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from the Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.

In this argument the author assumes that people with graduate degree is facing difficulty to get jobs in teaching field from last two decades and same thing happing with graduate students of Waymarsh University. The conclusion cited that this problem will solve because a rising number of people will be joining college over the next 10 years. However, the argument is flawed because it fails to supply sufficient evidence in favor of author’s conclusion. 
First of all, the argument readily assumes that, according to the demographic trends a rising number of people will join college in the next 10 years. But they did not mention anything about what kind of trends, they are taking about? However, taking the assumption as true we cannot agree with their prediction that job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching. Because they have undermined the fact that the more students join the college the more graduate will came out, which will result more unemployment will rise over the next years. Hence, without a proper examination of the facts, it is totally inappropriate to give any statement. 
Secondly, the argument also implies that just by increasing number of students they can solve the job vacancy problem. But they do not consider the fact that may be the current situation is occurring due to having a sufficient number of teachers available on the college and there is no such evidence that the current teachers will leave their job in the coming years. Therefore, if the current position will still be filled with teachers, there is no chance that new unemployed teaches will get the position. 
In light of above unsubstantiated assumption and poor evidence the argument is flawed. It could be considerably strengthened if the author mentions proper evidence about the prediction about improvement. Also, they need to consider other possible facts related to the matter. Nevertheless, if the aforementioned concerns are not addressed the argument will remain unconvincing.

bb · Answer

Wow. This got the highest score from the automated GMATAWA rater!

Moderator Edit:  
   AWA Score: 6 out of 6!

I have used a GMATAWA auto-grader to evaluate your essay and it scored it at 6 out of 6!

Coherence and connectivity: 5/5 
This rating corresponds to the flow of idea and expression from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analysed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 5/5  
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs is evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 5/5 
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pkbiet · Answer

Please evaluate my essay

The argument debates that in last two decades, people who had been graduating out of the college including from Waymarsh University, had found difficult in securing a teacher’s job. However, author assumes that the current situation will be resolved in coming decade as the demographic tendencies indicate that enrolment in college will go up as compared to previous decades which will require teachers. The argument is clearly baseless and hollow in the way presented by author. There is no evidence, no statistics of the same which can corroborate the fact and is inconclusive of hypothesis, thus a leap of faith without any clear outcomes.

First, the author states that previous two decades those who had earned their degrees from the college including Waymarsh University had a tough finding to land a teacher’s job. This is a simple statement without any logical or statistical data. The author would have been in a better position if at all he would have tried to present the data based on some research by any established agency.

Second, the author has stated that in coming decades the problem of unemployment can be over as demographic trends are indicating that increase number of people will be enrolling in college. This is again a half way presented data. Increase in enrolment cannot be assumed to increase of job in market. The author has failed to recognise that increase in enrolment equates also the number of passing out student. Also the increase in enrolment will be substantiative which will require new teachers but in very small proportion as compared. Hence the data is inconclusive and cannot be banked upon.

Third, the author has failed to link that just by merely increasing the enrolment in university will help solve teacher’s job position will be enough, is a flawed thought process. Also he has failed to concede the fact that the current position filled with teachers will also remain filled, which cannot help the author presuming that job will be created and unemployment will be met.

In conclusion, the argument remains flawed for the reasons cited above. The author should present facts corroborated with relevant facts and developments if any. From the facts presented by author, he should have tried to have a holistic survey with a large number of respondents. In order to access the merit of the certain situation the author should have full access of the knowledge and measures to increase the same. Without this information the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

Hello pkbiet

I assume the following is the prompt your essay is based on

"Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from the Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields."

If this is the case, the following is the score based on your essay.

AWA Score: 5.5-6 out of 6!

I have used a GMATAWA auto-grader to evaluate your essay.

Coherence and connectivity: 4.5/5 
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 4.5/5  
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5 
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manpreet0511 · Answer

Can anyone evaluate my AWA??

Argument, as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper, argued that in the next decade, academic job seekers, including those who graduated from Waymarsh University, can expect a dramatic improvement in job market for college level teaching positions in their field. In order to bolster its claim, argument refers to a demographic trend that indicates an increase in number of people reaching college age over the next 10 years. However, because of several reasons discussed in subsequent paragraphs, evidence presented offers dubious support for argument's conclusion.

First, argument unwarrantedly assumes that increase in number of people reaching college age is equivalent to increase in number of people who will actually be attending the college. Consider a situation in which the economic conditions of a country are dreadful, and more and more people are forced into labour so as to support their families. In such situation, people reaching college age would already be working, and would not be able to pursue higher education. Hence, even though number of people reaching college age is dramatically increasing, the number of people attending college will not increase and consequently job opportunities will not increase.

Second, evidence cited involves ambiguous language. For example, argument asserts that demographic trends indicate that an "increasing" number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years. Here, the term "increasing" is indefinite. The word "increasing" might mean increasing at a rate of 10% which perhaps cause an increase in job opportunities, though definitely not plethora of jobs. Alternatively, it can denote an increase at a rate of 1%. which certainly will not increase the job opportunities in the field of college level teaching.

Third, by stating that people with graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialities at the college level, argument ignores that one needs to pursue doctorate in order to qualify for teaching academic specialities at college level, and graduate degree is not sufficient to be eligible for such jobs. So even if job market will dramatically improve, graduates seeking college level teaching jobs will certainly not be benefitted from this increase.

In summary, argument is neither sound nor persuasive and fails to convey any compelling reason for its conclusion.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 5 out of 6

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Coherence and connectivity: 3.5/5  
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Paragraph structure and formation: 4.5/5  
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Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5 
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deepika257 · Answer

Please evaluate my Writing as well.

The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper:
“Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their
academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially
hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including
those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age
over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking
college-level teaching positions in their fields.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

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MY RESPONSE
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The article claims that academic job seekers would have more opportunities in coming 10 years. This claim is based on the demographic trends that indicate the increase in number of college age people in next decade and hence, increase in the academic market. The article provides, for comparison, the struggles of graduates to find a teaching job at college level for past two decades. However, the information given in the article is superficial and lacks proper reasoning. The argument and conclusion made in the article are based on assumptions with no foundational evidences.

For example, article mentions that for past 20 years, graduates, especially from Waymarsh University, are struggling to get a teaching job in colleges. But, no reasons have been provided behind this problem. And, author assumes that this problem is because of lack of students in colleges and increase in number of students will improve the situation. This assumption is baseless unless author provides the analysis from past 20 years on the factors responsible for the unemployment of graduates from universities including Waymarsh University. There is a possibility that reasons like change in the minimum educational qualification for a teaching job in colleges, poor educational quality at Waymarsh University or poor grades of graduates played a role in the unemployment of these graduates. In that case, the author's argument will become extremely weak and unconvincing.

Even if, small market is the major reason behind unemployment of graduates, the increase in number of college age people will not necessarily help the situation. For instance, it is not guaranteed and article does not prove that the colleges will increase their intake of fresh students or, that all the college age people will take admission in colleges or are able to afford the educational expenses. For convenience, suppose colleges increase the number of seats in their programs and most of the college age people end up in colleges, it will take only three to four years for them to graduate from colleges and, after graduating these people would also start looking for jobs. So, the unemployment situation would actually worsen in this case. Hence, the author's claim as such sounds baseless.

In conclusion, the author may consider to include detailed analysis or survey results on the actual reasons of unemployment and why Waymarsh University is most affected. This will help the author to make a strong basis for his argument. Also, author can provide specifications of how the increase in number of college-age people would help to increase the size of market for teaching positions and decrease unemployment among graduates in coming 10 years. This will help to make the article's conclusion more convincing and reasonable.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 5 - 5.5 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 3.5/5  
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 5/5   
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4/5 
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Good Luck

rc9811 · Answer

Please evaluate my AWA

Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.

The argument claims that better times are coming for academic job seekers and one can expect that there will be an increase in the number of college-level teaching jobs. The argument is based on the premise that the demographic trends indicate an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next decade. However, the argument makes several unsupported assumptions and stated this way the argument fails to consider several key factors which could call the conclusion to question. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.
First issue to be addressed is that the argument claims that throughout the last two decades, graduates especially with a degree from Waymarsh University found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at college level. However the argument fails to mention several critical information such as reason behind the difficulty over the last two decades, whether difficulty is because of fewer number of college level teaching jobs or because of grduates especially from Waymarsh University lack the required skillset to secure a teaching job. If the argument provides this information it would be helpful to analyse this argument.
Second, the final stage of the argument claims that the number of people reaching college will increase in a decade and thus creating college level teaching jobs. However the argument fails to consider a fact that increase in the number of people at college age does not mean that every person reaching college age would go to college. For example, even though the number of people reaching college age increases, what if the percentage of people choosing to attend college is less than or equal to that of the last two decades?
In summary, the argument fails to convince because of the faulty assumptions aforementioned. If the argument had drawn up on the examples as suggested, and thereby plugging in the gaps in the reasoning the argument would have been far sounder on the whole.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 5 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 5/5  
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 4/5  
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5  
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!

PS: No paragraphing

Good Luck

Harman101 · Answer

kindly evaluate my essay

The given argument appeared in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper. It states that those who earned graduate degrees, particularly Waymarsh University graduates, found it difficult to get jobs at the college level. Further the writer states that in the next decade the number of people reaching college age will increase, and consequently the job market will improve. Here the argument is flawed. Primary flaw is the lack of sufficient evidence to support the argument. Also this argument is weak and vulnerable to criticism because it relies on clearly false assumption.

To begin with, the author has outrightly stated that better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers. But the author has not given any evidence to support this. The author has not mentioned any plan which is implemented to bring out this change. Thus, the argument is weakened because of lack of supporting idea.

Secondly, the argument states that as per the demographic trends, the number of students reaching the college will increase in the next 10 years, which will lead to improvement in the job market. However, the author has not explicitly mentioned the assumption on which this conclusion is based. This has opened the argument to various interpretations. It is not made clear as to how the increasing number of people reaching college age would benefit the people seeking college-level teaching positions. Consequently, the argument is weak.

Thirdly, it can be possible that even if people reaching the college age increase but they will not go to the college once they reach that age. So it is not certain that they will go to the college. And if it is not certain then how the author can conclude that increase in the number of such people would improve job market. Because it is clear that if they do not go the college, they will not have any impact on the job market related to the college-level teaching positions.
 
In conclusion, the argument is weak because of the lack of supporting evidences and explicit assumptions. To strengthen this argument, the author needs to present a clear assumption so that the argument becomes less vulnerable to criticism and strong evidences.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 5.5 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 5/5  
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 4.5/5   
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4/5 
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!

Good Luck

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