Welcome to GMAT Club!Please read the following AWA forum rules in the post in the link below, and repost your essay according to the rules. Also, make proper paragraphs of your essay, just don't copy and paste as it will affect your essay score.
https://gmatclub.com/forum/awa-forum-ru ... 64141.htmlGood luck!coolgirl123 wrote:
Hi,
This is my first post! Can someone please review my essay? Thanks in advance!
The following appeared as part of an article in a photography magazine:
“When choosing whether to work in color or in black-and-white, the photographer who wishes to be successful should keep in mind that because color photographs are more true to life, magazines use more color photographs than black-and-white ones, and many newspapers are also starting to use color photographs. The realism of color also accounts for the fact that most portrait studios use more color film than black-and-white film. Furthermore, there are more types of color film than black-and-white film available today. Clearly, photographers who work in color have an advantage over
those who work in black-and-white.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
Your response:
The argument encourages photographers to work in color, rather than in black-and-white, for a successful career in photography. This is based on the premise that color photographs are more realistic and truer to life, and magazines and photo studios use more color photographs than black-and-white photographs. Not only is this line of reasoning derivative and oversimplified, but the argument also makes several uncorroborated assumptions that must be addressed.
Firstly, the argument provides no concrete evidence to support the claim that color photographs are better than black-and-white photographs. The argument uses subjective metrics, such as realism, to make this assessment, thereby making it sound more like a personal preference than like a proven fact or statistic.
Furthermore, the argument also mentions, without sufficient proof, that magazines use more color photographs than black-and-white ones. Does this mean that all magazines now prefer color photographs over black-and-white ones? The argument fails to address the possibility that only certain kinds of magazines, for instance, a kids’ magazine, prefer color photographs, while other brands still go for black-and-white photographs. Similarly, the argument’s stance on newspapers and portrait studios also falls flat, due to a lack of clarity on the details. Even if more newspapers are now opting for color photographs, what if the majority of newspapers still prefer black-and-white photographs, especially if the printing costs associated with black-and-white photographs are lower than color photographs?
Lastly, the argument mentions that there are more types of color film than black-and-white film available in the market. While the availability of film may make color photography more common, it doesn’t necessarily mean it is also an advantage to photographers who work in color. More color photographers in the industry could translate to more competition for jobs. In such a case, it would be a better career option for a photographer to choose back-and-white photography.
As explained in the above lines, the argument, as it stands, is flawed and logically incoherent.