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Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor.

The society that a person lives in forms an integral part of his life. There should be a harmonious co-existence among people living in nearby places. This ensures that people can live together peacefully. The nature of a person can be similar or different from his neighbours. But each of one them must ensure that they adjust themselves to ensure unity among them. While some people may think that the nature of their neighbours is not important to them, others would disagree. In my view, the behaviour of neighbours is important and should have some relevant characteristics.

One of the major characteristics are the ability of people to maintain cordial relations in their neighbourhood. Such people are considered easy to live with and are respected by others. For example, last weekend, I was at my home relaxing after having a hectic work schedule during the entire week. I heard some loud noise made by my brother outside our home. When I went outside, I saw her quarreling with our immediate neighbours. They were fighting over the issue of car parking. I parked my car last night at a place that was somewhat near the entrance of their home. This annoyed them and they created a mountain out of a molehill. Although the incident was minor, if they would have explained the issue peacefully, this matter would have been resolved easily. Instead they handled in an aggressive way which disturbed many other people. Even though I parked my car somewhere else after this, but this ruined the composure of everyone. As you can see, if neighbours do not respect other people and start to fight with other over minor issues, it can damage the relations. This can make people have bad opinion of their neighbours.

Another important trait of a good neighbour is that he should not intrude into the private matters of other people. If they do so, people can get really hurt and may not tolerate them This sets a bad example in their minds of their neighbours. For instance, I remember one of the incidences when results of one of the competitive exams came out. I did not score as well as others due to which I could not grab a seat in my dream college. I was really upset with the results. I shared the results with my parents and they praised me for the hard work that I put in and made me feel good by saying positive things. But when our neighbours got t know about it, they spread this information to the whole society. They passed some very bad words about my performance with others which made me really bad. Although my parents opposed them and tried to keep me away from all that they said, I heard a lot about how they compared my performance with their son who did really well in the exam. This experience taught me that we as neighbours, should not intrude into others lives and question them. Being a good neightbours requires that one respect the lives and decisions of others.

In sum, as every person has a different definition of whether we should think about the traits of our neighbours, I believe that it is very important to live with in a society full of people who are willing to adjust. Not only the neighbours should maintain cordial relations with others but they should also respect the privacy of others and should not question their decisions. I would suggest everyone to try to be good neighbours to other people so that they do not create any trouble for them and all can live peacefully.

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It is really good in its structure and fluency.

Only minor point via which I would paraphrase way much better your sentences. The result is more shining.

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he should not intrude into the private matters of other people


He should take into account neighborhood's privacy.

For the rest it is good.

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Thanks Carcass! Just wanted to know one thing- should the introduction and conclusion be kept brief or elongated?

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