Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as

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Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,  a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards, which it had manufactured since 1889.

A) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,

B) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, and joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,
 
C) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s to become known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,

D) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s, becoming known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,

E) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,

generis · Answer

OFFICIAL EXPLANATION

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THE PROMPT  
 
• Misplaced modifier.
Pay attention to the non-underlined portion
→  a period when the company was  is a noun modifier (an appositive, in fact) that must describe—a time period.
→ the Modifier Touch rule states that noun modifiers should be as close as possible to the noun that they modify
•  a period when  must logically modify the noun right before that phrase, so the underlined portion of the sentence should end by referring to a time period such as  the 1970s .

THE OPTIONS  
 
•  of all time  was not  a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards 
• we have a misplaced modifier. 
ELIMINATE A
 
• This option creates a fragment. Remove the non-essential clause in order to see the error more clearly:
→ B) Shigeru Miyamoto, . . .  and  joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,
Where is the first verb? The word  and  signals that he did something else.
ELIMINATE B
 
•  to become  is not quite right. The phrasing suggests that Miyamoto joined Nintendo  in order to become known —that he worked for Nintendo because he wanted to be famous.
Wrong meaning.
• "Misplaced modifier":  the 1970s  should be placed right before  a period when the company was beginning its foray 
ELIMINATE C
 
• as in options A and C,  in the late 1970s  should replace  of all time . The wrong noun is getting modified.
ELIMINATE D
 
• I see no error
• The misplaced modifier is fixed. Now the modifier "a period when the company was beginning" logically refers  to the late 1970s 
• The fragment in Option B is fixed. This option places the verb  joined  after the non-essential clause.

COMMENTS

GMAC loves to test modifiers. 
It's late here; I'll keep this short.
As I have been writing and as was posted in  this  space (where you're reading) in which the OE now sits, a label is not an explanation.
 Kudos to those who explained.

zhanbo · Answer

My answer is  (E) . It took me 48 seconds.

In reading (A), I realized that "a period when..." should be juxtaposed with "the late 1970s" in order to clarify its meaning. Eliminate A, C, and D.

Problems with (B): the use of "and" results in either a fragment or poorly constructed sentence.

tyildirim92 · Answer

Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,  a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards, which it had manufactured since 1889.

A) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,  // perfect

B) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, and joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,  // a run-on sentence 
 
C) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s to become known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,  // a distorted meaning. Miyamoto did not join Nintendo to become known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games. it is supposed to be out of his control to become known as someone, right?

D) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s, becoming known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,  // these two actions "joining" and "becoming known as the creator" are two separate happenings. using a verb-ing modifier to give a cause and effect relationship or to modify the subject is illogical.

E) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,  // this sentence is grammatically correct but A is better because Miyamoto became known as the creator after he joined Nintendo.

KaramveerBakshi · Answer

Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,  a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards, which it had manufactured since 1889.

A) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time, -  Period should modify 1970s. Incorrect.

B) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, and joined Nintendo in the late 1970s, -  Modifier error is rectified but there is a SV error. Incorrect.

C) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s to become known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time, -  Period should modify 1970s. Incorrect.

D) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s, becoming known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time, -  Period should modify 1970s. Incorrect.

E) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, joined Nintendo in the late 1970s, -  Both modifier and SV error are rectified. Correct.

Hence, the answer is Option (E).

monk123 · Answer

Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time, a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards, which it had manufactured since 1889.
 
POE:
Stop sign- find none, start reading (B).
Eliminate (B) - Modifier error.
Eliminate (C) - Change of meaning.
Eliminate (D)- wrong tense.
(E) looks good. Now, (A) vs (E). (E) is simple, clear, and concise. Eliminate (A).

A) Shigeru Miyamoto  joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known  as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,

B)  Shigeru Miyamoto , who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time,  and joined  Nintendo in the late 1970s,

C) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s  to become known  as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,

D) Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,  becoming  known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time,

E) Shigeru Miyamoto, who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time, joined Nintendo in the late 1970s, -   CORRECT

Abhishek009 · Answer

Must be (E) -

Shigeru Miyamoto,  who became known as the creator of some of the best video games of all time,  joined Nintendo in the late 1970s,  a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards, which it had manufactured since 1889.

Varunsawhney8 · Answer

E is Correct

Sushil117 · Answer

Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as the creator of some of the best-selling video games of all time, a period when the company was beginning its foray into electronic entertainment and abandoning the production of playing cards, which it had manufactured since 1889.

"a period of time", talking about a particular time period. "off all time" isn't a particular time period.Hence A,C and D are off the list.
between B and E, use of " and joined" in B isn't correct .So ,E is the right answer

generis · Answer

The official explanation is  here .

Shigeru Miyamoto joined Nintendo in the late 1970s and became known as

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