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Re: The newly developed choreography methodology, which is antic
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07 May 2013, 06:27
Please correct this..
The newly developed choreography methodology (...) will be able to accommodate a broader range of dance styles
1) than the current curriculum can
This first part is correct. "broader than" is the correct idiom, and it correctly compares two methodologies
2) and with more creative latitude
Not so sure about this part. This is not clear IMO
This is how I would change it:
will be able to accommodate a broader range of dance styles and (will be able) to use more creative latitude than the current curriculum can.
This should be better: it completes the comparison (in the original sentence is left unfinished "more creative latitude" than what?), I don't feel like the second part should be used as an indipendet clause ( has no verb and "will be able to" cannot refer to the second part also).
option 2:
will be able to accommodate a broader range of dance styles than the current curriculum can, and will use a more creative latitude
Still the comparison is not very clear, but now at least the second part has a verb and can be used at the end of the sentence
Does this help?