Please evaluate my essay response:
The argument states that a foreign manufacturer who duplicated motorcycle X has failed to attract customers of motorcycle X because of the absence of noise that the original creates and the effectiveness of features mentioned in television advertisements that highlight its durability and sleek lines along with the voiceover music that do not sound noise from the engine roar. Stated in this way the argument fails to provide several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The argument is thus unconvincing and has many flaws.
To begin with, the argument readily assumes that the television advertisements that promote the sleekness and durability of motorcycle X do not portray the loud noise made and this is why customers are attracted more to the original than the duplicate. This statement is a stretch. It assumes that, customers could base their decisions to purchase the motorcycle solely on the basis of watching advertisements. The claim could be made more believable if more evidence were provided. To illustrate, maybe the duplicate could attract the customers based on its quietness and cheaper price and still match the performance of the motorcycle X, but because of the long associated brand name for 70 years, customers still favour the motorcycle X.
Next, the argument states that the foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar American-made cars and sell at least as well. This is again, a very unsupported claim, as the author fails to demonstrate any correlation between the similarity in sales of motorcycles versus those of cars. For example, sales of motorcycles could be more due to a variety of other factors such as horsepower, mileage, performance, and service quality. Directly comparing the sales of cars and motorcycles does little to support the claim.The claim could be strengthened by information that would make this claim more convincing.
Finally, What has been done to promote the duplicate? Also, how does the duplicate compare with the motorcycle X other than the cheaper price and quietness? Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
Based on the above mentioned reasons, the argument is considered weak. To asess a certain situation one must gather all the relevant factors and provide the relevant facts. Therefore, the argument is inconclusive and open to debate.