Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for more than

Question

Argument:
“Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for more than 70 years. Although one foreign company has copied the motorcycle and is selling it for less, the company has failed to attract motorcycle X customers—some say because its product lacks the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X. But there must be some other explanation. After all, foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar American-made cars, but they sell at least as well. Also, television advertisements for motorcycle X highlight its durability and sleek lines, not its noisiness, and the ads typically have voice-overs or rock music rather than engine-roar on the sound track.”

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counter examples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.

Analysis:

The above argument that the foreign company which tried to copy Motorcycle X's design and is selling it for a lower price is not fairly reasoned because of the following reasons.

As mentioned, Motorcycle X has been manufactured in The United States for over 70 years, the brand and the motorcycle has captured the market over a long time and the motorcycle is now an emotional and sentimental asset/vehicle for the riders of Motorcycle X.

There could be various reasons why motorcycle X is preferred by the buyers in the country other than the exceptionally loud noise made by the motorcycle. It could be the connectivity of the service center or availability of spare parts or even how easy it is to maintain motorcycle X that could be the reason why people have not shifted from motorcycle X to the new foreign bike even for a lower price.

Comparison between foreign cars and this motorcycle is vaguely mentioned as a way to distract the reader. Both cars and motorcycles come under different categories and cannot be compared in a similar manner. It could also be said that foreign cars are made of better materials and the people of the country where motorcycle X is manufactured either don't trust the build quality of the bike or have not been exposed to foreign motorcycles.

Again, how the motorcycle is advertised can be a leading factor why it has failed to attract customers from motorcycle X to this new motorcycle. Motorcycle lovers might not prefer advertisements with rock music/voice-overs or the design or sleek lines of the bike or even the fact that the motorcycle is not noisy. It is possible that the riders want to know more about the bike and its usage.

Although the argument has its flaws, I believe that the foreign motorcycle company can attract more customers from its rival if it can create the buzz around its motorcycle and get the riders informed about things other than price, design, or the fact that it is less noisy than motorcycle X like the usability, customer support, maybe even, if it has launched in other markets, inform the customers about their success in other nations.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 5 out of 6

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Coherence and connectivity: 4/5 
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 3/5   
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5 
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Jeff1992 · Answer

According to the extract, a certain unnamed company has copied the make of motorcycle X selling it for a lesser price .It would have been more factual if the original and and fake motorcycle X producers (companies) were named.

Stating that the copied motorcycle X lacks the loud noise of the original is less substantial as a basis for comparison. A certain more detailed engine mechanics must be responsible for this loud noise and it should have been stated to firm up the argument. Same idea could be generalized as responsible for the loudness of American car engines.

Television advertisements not stressing on the loudness of motorcycle X but rather its durability and sleekness and the general loudness of American vehicles, should tell that American vehicles are naturally noisy and not a special attribute to create a brand position for customers.

The prices of both original and copied motorcycle X were compared to to some extent. However, other other attributes such as durability, aesthetics, speed, production attributes, sales and demand statistics could have been added to to make the argument more substantial.

Jeff1992 · Answer

this was my practice essay to the passage extract and it was marked correct. Rate me y'all.

Sajjad1994 · Answer

Welcome to GMAT Club! AWA Score: 4.5 out of 6 I have used a GMAT AWA auto-grader to evaluate your essay. Coherence and connectivity: 2/5 This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters. Paragraph structure and formation: 4.5/5 The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay. Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5 This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave! Recommended AWA guides: https://gmatclub.com/forum/the-gmatclub ... 36251.html https://gmatclub.com/forum/how-to-get-6 ... 64327.html Good Luck

saifmd129 · Answer

Argument:-

“Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for over 70 years. Although one foreign company has copied the motorcycle and is selling it for less, the company has failed to attract motorcycle X customers - some say because its product lacks the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X. But there must be some other explanation. After all, foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar American-made cars, but they sell at least as well. Also, television advertisements for motorcycle X highlight its durability and sleek lines, not its noisiness, and the ads typically have voice-overs or rock music rather than engine-roar on the sound track."

Answer:-

The argument attributes the inability of a foreign company to attract customers for its motorcycle, which is a copy of Motorcycle X originally manufactured in the United States, to the lack of loud noise that the latter makes. The argument suffers from several flaws, ranging from insufficient evidence to making unwarranted assumptions.

First of all, the author cites evidence that compares foreign-made cars with their American counterparts stating the former to be quieter but selling just as well, which, even if true, fails to relate to the poor sales of the foreign company’s motorcycle. The argument assumes a correlation between the sales of cars and motorcycles based on the sound produced to be the same which is illogical and misleading. There may be a case that quieter foreign cars sell just as well as American made cars but the same cannot be said in the case of motorcycles, where many customers purchase motorcycles just for the iconic sound produced by them. Likewise, it is also stated in the argument that the foreign company’s motorcycle is cheaper than Motorcycle X. Most average consumers may correlate the price of an item with its quality. The possibility of a consumer who is considering buying a motorcycle getting influenced by the low price of a motorcycle must be evaluated to reduce concerns regarding the argument.

Secondly, the author states another piece of evidence to support the claim of the argument that the advertisements for motorcycle X contain rock music and feature its sleek design and durability which does not promote engine roar. The author fails to take into consideration that the sales of a motorcycle may depend on its durability and sleek design which could be the reason for the poor sales of the foreign company’s motorcycles. There may be several other flaws regarding the quality, engine or brand of the motorcycle which would need to be scrutinised to evaluate the assumption.

The argument that the lack of exceptionally loud noise cannot be the only isolated reason for the poor sales of the foreign company’s motorcycle seems compelling, although the pieces of evidence provided by the author are unconvincing and erroneous, and several other factors will be required to be evaluated before a convincing conclusion can be drawn.

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Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 4 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 2/5  
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 3.5/5   
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5  
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!

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saifmd129 · Answer

Argument-
"In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into the Heart's Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960's, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door, the owners of the Good Earth Café, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires."

Analysis-
Citing the financial status of restaurants providing vegetarian and non-vegetarian food, the author tries to make an extreme claim that people are not concerned about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. The argument suffers from a series of flaws, ranging from erroneous assumptions to misleading evidence, that undermine the conclusion drawn by the author.

First of all, the author states the concern of people not regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses like they used to about a decade ago, but fails to provide any concrete evidence. The author fails to take into account the changes that have occurred in the lifestyle of people in over a decade, the obsession of the current generation with gym and physical activities and the creation of a new category of vegetarians called vegans. Supporting evidence like the size of the control group used for the survey, the demographics of these people and the age group can help reinforce the argument being debated.

Secondly, the author provides misleading evidence regarding the financial status of a restaurant selling vegetarian food as compared to a Beef House. The author fails to take into consideration the possible causes of the financial status of these restaurants, which could be due to a faulty marketing strategy or the quality of the food provided. It can also be argued that the region in which these restaurants are situated has a larger percentage of non-vegetarians.

Thus, the arguments and evidence provided by the author undermine the author's claims, however, the use of more supporting evidence and the ability of the author to provide deeper insights into the eating habits of people through a survey could substantially strengthen the author’s claims.

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Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 4.5 - 5 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 3/5  
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 5/5   
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 5/5  
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!

Good Luck

saifmd129 · Answer

Argument:-

“Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for over 70 years. Although one foreign company has copied the motorcycle and is selling it for less, the company has failed to attract motorcycle X customers - some say because its product lacks the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X. But there must be some other explanation. After all, foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar American-made cars, but they sell at least as well. Also, television advertisements for motorcycle X highlight its durability and sleek lines, not its noisiness, and the ads typically have voice-overs or rock music rather than engine-roar on the sound track."

Answer:-

Citing the failure of a particular foreign manufacturer to attract customers of a United States Manufacturer’s motorcycles, the argument presents a series of evidence which could possibly explain the underlying reasons. The argument presented suffers from a number of flaws ranging from unsound assumptions to misleading evidence, which collectively undermine the conclusion drawn by the author.

First of all, the author attributes the poor sales of the motorcycles produced by the foreign manufacturer to the lack of the exceptionally loud sound produced by Motorcycle X. Furthermore, the author correctly suggests the possibility of other factors which may have contributed to the poor sales of the motorcycles produced by the foreign manufacturer. When purchasing a motorcycle, consumers often compare the built quality, engine horsepower and repair costs of different motorcycles, which also play an important role in making a decision. The author later presents misleading evidence which compares the quieter foreign-made cars with similar cars which are made in America, but sell just as well. The author fails to take into consideration that the market for cars and motorcycles is completely different. The comparable sales of quieter foreign-made cars with similar American-made cars may be true for the car market, but the same cannot be stated for the motorcycle industry.

Secondly, the author presents another misleading piece of evidence stating that the television advertisement for motorcycle X highlights its durability and sleek lines, not its loud sound, with the ads typically having rock music playing in the background. The argument does not take into account that, in general, a motorcycle buyer visits a showroom before making a purchase and may even test ride one to check the durability, top speeds and exhaust notes. Moreover, the argument fails to consider that certain consumers buy a particular motorcycle just for the exhaust note it produces, which may also be a factor in making a purchase decision.

Thus, the author’s argument that the lack of exceptionally loud noise cannot be the only isolated reason for the poor sales of the foreign company’s motorcycle seems compelling, although the pieces of evidence provided by the author are unconvincing and erroneous and the evaluation of several other factors will be required before a convincing conclusion can be drawn.

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Sajjad1994 · Answer

AWA Score: 5.5 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 6 out of 6
The essay demonstrates excellent coherence and connectivity as the writer presents a clear and logical progression of ideas. Each paragraph is well-organized and flows smoothly to the next, with appropriate use of transitional words and phrases to guide the reader through the argument.

Word structure: 5 out of 6
The word structure in the essay is generally strong, with a varied use of vocabulary and sentence structures. However, there are a few instances where sentences could be restructured for better clarity and precision.

Paragraph structure and formation: 6 out of 6
The paragraphs in the essay are well-structured, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point and contributes to the overall coherence of the essay.

Language and Grammar: 5 out of 6
The language and grammar in the essay are mostly accurate, but there are a few minor errors and awkward phrasings. For example, "The argument presented suffers from a number of flaws ranging from unsound assumptions to misleading evidence, which collectively undermine the conclusion drawn by the author." could be revised to "The argument presented is flawed due to unsound assumptions and misleading evidence, which collectively undermine the author's conclusion."

Vocabulary and word expression: 6 out of 6
The essay demonstrates a strong command of vocabulary and word expression. The writer uses a diverse range of vocabulary to convey ideas effectively and precisely.

Overall, the essay is well-written with a coherent structure and strong language skills. However, there are a few areas where minor improvements could be made for better clarity and precision. Therefore, the essay is evaluated with a score of 5.5 out of 6, with room for slight improvement in language and grammar.

Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for more than

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