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To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

The reflection of indigenous traits of a society comes from how strongly are its people connected to their social values and culture. The more strongly they are bonded to their customs and values, the more they reflect their rich social heritage. Moreover, the strength of a culture also depends on how strongly its society is connected and how strongly it believes in its values. However, with the rise in Globalization and social media , the whole world is connected to each other. Subsequently, people learn about others social values and inherit some of their traits, creating a motley of cultures. Hence, it becomes quite laborious to understand a discrete society.

Major cities reflect the global view as they are the source of change. Everything originates from there and starts dispersing to each segment of society. Similarly, people living in major cities are more connected to world than any other segment of society. Subsequently, they inherit more values of other cultures. Moreover, with the advancement in technology and higher rate of literacy in major cities, the needs and desires of people are also rising. They aspire to lead a comfortable and luxurious life and to achieve the same, they work day and night. Hence, it becomes quite difficult for them to maintain a social and professional life. Thus, major cities rather makes it difficult to understand the most important characteristics of a society.

However, comparatively it is quite convenient to study areas near countryside to understand the prominent characteristics of society as the reach of technology is quite limited there. Moreover, they get ample time to sustain their culture and social values. For instance, American culture has been preserved by Red Indians living in a countryside or the values of Indus valley civilization are still sustained by people living in remote areas of Sindh,Punjab and Kashmir.

Hence, the true reflection of a society comes from the areas who still strongly believe in their culture and have strongly incorporated the values of their ancestors in them. The will to sustain the heritage is missing in people living in major cities. Hence, studying major cities does not help in any way in understanding the true values of society.

KyleWiddison · Answer

You do know that the Issue Argument is no longer a part of the GMAT? The only essay now is the Analysis of the Argument...see the format/timing of the GMAT here: https://www.mba.com/us/the-gmat-exam/gma ... iming.aspx

KW

rishabh1990 · Answer

Hi Kyle,
I know the same. Actually, I'm preparing for GRE. So, would like to have your insightful views on my Issue Essay.

Regards

havoc7860 · Answer

Hi Kyle,

Could you kindly review my AWA, it was my first one so hopefully i can improve with a few pointers from you.
Thanks in advance.

The argument claims that Motrocycle X has been manufactured in the United States for 70 years. Although one foreign company has copied the motorcycle and selling it for less, the company has failed to attract motorcycle X customers - some say because its product lacks the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X and goes on to say that there must be some other reason for the less sales of the of copy the motorcycle. The argument fails to account many facts and makes assumptions about the customer behaviour and hence has many flaws.

Firstly, the argument fails to account for the uniqueness that a product can bring to a particular customer. For example a cutomer interested in bunjee jumping is in it for the thrill as well as the uncertainity the sport brings with it. The customers actually sign a form which frees the bunjee jumping organisers from any accidents that may take place during the jump. Whereas the same kind of enthusiasm might not be evoked from something like a canoe ride across a lake. Thus the author fails to consider the appeal that a particular product has to a customer.

Secondly, the author goes onto calim that foreign cars are quieter than similar American-made cars but sell atleast as well. Here the author fails to account that the customer base that the similar American-made cars cater to might be significantly different from the customer base that the Foreign based cars cater to. The selling point for foreign based cars might be that they are much cheaper when compared to their American counterparts. So the author makes an unwanted comparison between two unrelated things. For example we cannot compare the market for baseball bats and cricket bats. Both serve a seperate audience.

Finally, the author says that the Motorcycle X is advertised based on its durability and sleek lines, not noisiness, and the ads typically have voice overs or rock music rather than engine-roar on the soundtrack, but he fails to consider that there might be other ways than just advertisements on television to highlight to potential customers that Motorcycle X is noisy. For instance this particular feature might be highlighted when the customer comes in for a test ride or vists the site hosted online for Motorcycle X's sale. Thus the author makes the most basic error by assuming that the television advertisements are the only way to communicate the different features of Motorcycle X to its target audience.

In conclusion the author's argument is not sound as he fails to take into consideration the above mentioned points. Had the author taken into consideration the points mentioned above he may have had a strong case for his view. He fails to do so and hence presents an argument that is vulnerable to criticism.

KyleWiddison · Answer

For the most part, the essay is just the test's way of determining if you can write in proper English and can maintain coherent thoughts. A great AWA score will not differentiate you from other applicants, so as long as you feel you can communicate in proper English and can approximate the quality of essay found in the good essays in the OG you shouldn't worry too much about the essays.

If you are really worried about getting a low score, I recommend purchasing a grading service from the GMAC (GMAT Write) or other grading service provider.

Good luck!
KW

If you are really worried about getting a low score, I recommend purchasing a grading service from the GMAC (GMAT Write) or other grading service provider.

Good luck!
KW

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