Even though more money was removed out of stock funds in July
as in any month since October 1987, sales of fund shares in July were not as low as an industry trade group had previously estimated.
Meaning Analysis :
1. In july (as compared to any other month since Oct 1987) more money was removed.
2. Still Sales of fund is not as low as it was estimated.
Error Analysis
1. Comparison Error (First part) :
As when used to compare must be followed by clause - "as in any month since October 1987" - here it is not followed by clause, moreover it tried to comapare "Removal of money in July" and "any month"
2. Incomplete Comparison marker - Idiom Error
More is used, but sentence lacks "than"
I watch movies more - Seems to be incomplete , shouldn't it be "i watch movies more than Documentary"
3. Comparison error (Second part) :
"sales of fund shares in July were not" as low as "an industry trade group had previously estimated" - Invalid comparison, we need some reference to sale in later part of as low as ,
without that this comparison seems to compare, sales with estimation
A. as in any month since October 1987, sales of fund shares in July were not as low as
Incorrect - Reason discussed above.
B. as had been in any other month since October 1987, sales of fund shares in July were not as low as what
Lack of "than" for "more"
as had been what, as had been removed or as had been deposited - Sentence is incomplete in itself
C. than there was in any other month since October 1987, sales of fund shares in July were not as low as that which
July (noun) should be compared with any other month (Noun phrase) - Here July is compared with action "there was in .. " - Incorrect
"as low as that which" - is highly incorrect construction
D. than in any month since October 1987, sales of fund shares in July were not as low as
partially Rectified the first "July" comparison error - Still it is not best
sales of fund shares in July were not as low as an industry trade group had previously estimated - Repeats Error #3 discussed in error analysis
E. than in any other month since October 1987, sales of fund shares in July were not as low as what
July compared to any other month - Correct
Use of what, make the reference clear to sales of funds - Rectified Error #3
Correct