egmat wrote:
arunmehta89 wrote:
Will it be fine if we write the sentence in the following way :-
Annual per capita income income of Bihar,which is India's poorest state , is lower than in the most impoverished countries of the world.
Hi there,
Annual per capita income of Bihar, which is India's poorest state, is lower than in the most impoverished countries of the world.
I’m afraid this sentence is not correct. It has the same error as in the original sentence. The comparison is not clear here. This sentence fails to convey what we are comparing the annual per capita income of Bihar with. After “lower than” we have “in the most impoverished countries” but what in these impoverished countries are we comparing the per capita income of Bihar with? This is not mentioned in the sentence.
The correct version of the sentence will be:
Annual per capita income of Bihar, which is India's poorest state, is lower than that of the most impoverished countries of the world.
We can also write the sentence by replacing “that of” with the “annual per capita income”.
Hope this helps.
Thanks.
Shraddha
Hi
egmatIn the below correct version of the sentence, colored part is modifying ''
annual per capita income of $111'',right? Is the colored part a N+N modifier?
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Bihar is India’s poorest state, with an annual per capita income of $111,
lower than that of the most impoverished countries of the world.
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Moreover, if we tweak the sentence as below, will the comparison still be correct? Use of ''Which'' is redundant but sentence is still grammatically correct?
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Bihar is India’s poorest state, with an annual per capita income of $111,
''which is lower than that of'' the most impoverished countries of the world.
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Thanks!