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wp06
Current Student
Joined: 29 Jun 2010
Last visit: 14 Jan 2019
Posts: 307
Given Kudos: 75
Status:Wharton bound
Affiliations: VFW, Iraq and Afghanistan Veterans of America, West Point Association of Graduates
Concentration: Strategic Management and Finance
GPA: 3.3
WE 1: Army Ranger / Infantry Platoon Leader Operation Iraqi Freedom (2 yrs)
WE 2: Company Executive Officer (1 yr)
WE 3: Company Commander (2 yrs)
04 Oct 2010, 18:14
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My approach to the cover letter:
Intro - Why Do I fit at MIT Sloan? I addressed my campus visit, students I met and got to know, sense of community, innovation, energy, C-functions
Why Do I want to learn at MIT? Focus on deep, broad skills with spirit of mind and hand -> actually going out and putting ideas into practice to improve society, the G-Lab where one can use skills to assist businesses in emerging markets, Leadership development program, flexibility in exploring multiple career paths
WHat motivates me and how does this relate to what I can learn and contribute to Sloan? I explained I am motivated to become a better leader due to my combat experiences leading Soldiers against an determined enemy and protecting innocent civilians. I mentioned working to get towns up and running through micro-grant, government coordination, etc.
I said I can use the leadership, cross-cultural teamwork, and problem-solving skills I gained in combat to overcome adversity and plan through tough challenges during team projects etc. I said while I am not the smartest person, I have a huge reservoir of practical experience to draw from that would benefit my classmates.
I went into detail on these three things (leadership, teamwork, and problem-solving) and used those to structure my letter.
Briefly tie values / impact on organization? I explained all the previous paragraphs in terms of my key values (similar to army values of integrity, responsibility, team work, loyalty, selfless-service, being there when people need you no matter what the situation whether it is a personal problem or you are taking massive machine gun fire or got hit with a suicide bomber etc. I explaind my impact on the Army over the past 5 years and what is has meant to me, where I want to go in life, and how MIT can help me get there.
I concluded with the respectful type ending "Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you this winter."
Not sure if this will help anyone and if you think I am way off, might make you feel better about your chances for an admit.
Round 1 is almost here, im retaking GMAT in two weeks and finishing essays, damn this is rough haha
Good luck everyone.
Intro - Why Do I fit at MIT Sloan? I addressed my campus visit, students I met and got to know, sense of community, innovation, energy, C-functions
Why Do I want to learn at MIT? Focus on deep, broad skills with spirit of mind and hand -> actually going out and putting ideas into practice to improve society, the G-Lab where one can use skills to assist businesses in emerging markets, Leadership development program, flexibility in exploring multiple career paths
WHat motivates me and how does this relate to what I can learn and contribute to Sloan? I explained I am motivated to become a better leader due to my combat experiences leading Soldiers against an determined enemy and protecting innocent civilians. I mentioned working to get towns up and running through micro-grant, government coordination, etc.
I said I can use the leadership, cross-cultural teamwork, and problem-solving skills I gained in combat to overcome adversity and plan through tough challenges during team projects etc. I said while I am not the smartest person, I have a huge reservoir of practical experience to draw from that would benefit my classmates.
I went into detail on these three things (leadership, teamwork, and problem-solving) and used those to structure my letter.
Briefly tie values / impact on organization? I explained all the previous paragraphs in terms of my key values (similar to army values of integrity, responsibility, team work, loyalty, selfless-service, being there when people need you no matter what the situation whether it is a personal problem or you are taking massive machine gun fire or got hit with a suicide bomber etc. I explaind my impact on the Army over the past 5 years and what is has meant to me, where I want to go in life, and how MIT can help me get there.
I concluded with the respectful type ending "Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you this winter."
Not sure if this will help anyone and if you think I am way off, might make you feel better about your chances for an admit.
Round 1 is almost here, im retaking GMAT in two weeks and finishing essays, damn this is rough haha
Good luck everyone.
04 Oct 2010, 18:17
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wp06
Thanks for post wp06. I'm sure it'll help a lot of people around here.
Good luck on the GMAT!
wp06
Current Student
Joined: 29 Jun 2010
Last visit: 14 Jan 2019
Posts: 307
Given Kudos: 75
Status:Wharton bound
Affiliations: VFW, Iraq and Afghanistan Veterans of America, West Point Association of Graduates
Concentration: Strategic Management and Finance
GPA: 3.3
WE 1: Army Ranger / Infantry Platoon Leader Operation Iraqi Freedom (2 yrs)
WE 2: Company Executive Officer (1 yr)
WE 3: Company Commander (2 yrs)
04 Oct 2010, 18:26
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Some strutural clarification to my post:
Greeting on Top
Paragraph I : I am seeking a place in the MBA Class of 2013, after visiting campus, participating in Class X, and meeting students like X, Y, Z, I am confident (insert whatever you want) that I will fit etc.
Paragraph II: Introduced my impact on an organization, I focused on the United States Army, I made sure to cite my progression up the ranks, increased responsibility, and demonstrated values/performance. I concluded my second paragraph with something like "I am confident that my leadership, teamwork, and problem-solving skills will help me to achieve the mission of MIT Sloan and advance the development of my classmates."
I then indented and expanded on the three sub-bullets so it looked like this:
Leadership: As a Platoon Leader in Iraq, I led my men......
Teamwork: Team Work: In Iraq, I was responsible for a remote patrol base that my Platoon shared with 40 Iraqi Army
Soldiers. I made every effort to learn their culture, improve their quality of life, share hardship.....
Problem-Solving: In combat, I was required to adapt to constantly changing situations. I had to adjust my plans based on logistics, risk, intelligence, and the enemy situation
Then I wrote my conclusion, tied up everything with how my experience at MIT (assessing fit), my past experiences/values, and my vision for the future tie in with the mission/core values of MIT Sloan. Then I did the thank you sentence/look forward to hearing from you etc.
Hope this helps people out,
Good luck
Ryan
Greeting on Top
Paragraph I : I am seeking a place in the MBA Class of 2013, after visiting campus, participating in Class X, and meeting students like X, Y, Z, I am confident (insert whatever you want) that I will fit etc.
Paragraph II: Introduced my impact on an organization, I focused on the United States Army, I made sure to cite my progression up the ranks, increased responsibility, and demonstrated values/performance. I concluded my second paragraph with something like "I am confident that my leadership, teamwork, and problem-solving skills will help me to achieve the mission of MIT Sloan and advance the development of my classmates."
I then indented and expanded on the three sub-bullets so it looked like this:
Leadership: As a Platoon Leader in Iraq, I led my men......
Teamwork: Team Work: In Iraq, I was responsible for a remote patrol base that my Platoon shared with 40 Iraqi Army
Soldiers. I made every effort to learn their culture, improve their quality of life, share hardship.....
Problem-Solving: In combat, I was required to adapt to constantly changing situations. I had to adjust my plans based on logistics, risk, intelligence, and the enemy situation
Then I wrote my conclusion, tied up everything with how my experience at MIT (assessing fit), my past experiences/values, and my vision for the future tie in with the mission/core values of MIT Sloan. Then I did the thank you sentence/look forward to hearing from you etc.
Hope this helps people out,
Good luck
Ryan
