sivasanjeev
A Sumatran rhinoceros was recently born in a Cincinnati zoo, the first birth in captivity of that species in more than a century, making it a landmark development for the effort to save the endangered animal.
(A) A Sumatran rhinoceros was recently born in a Cincinnati zoo, the first birth in captivity of that species in more than a century, making it
(B) A Sumatran rhinoceros was recently born in a Cincinnati zoo, and as the first birth of that species in captivity for more than a century, it is
(C) A Sumatran rhinoceros recently born in a Cincinnati zoo, as the first birth for that species in captivity for over a century, is
(D) The recent birth of a Sumatran rhinoceros in a Cincinnati zoo, the first birth in captivity for that species in over a century, is
(E) The recent birth of a Sumatran rhinoceros, as the first birth in over a century of that species in captivity, took place in a Cincinnati zoo,
look at choice A. there are some errors in it.
a abstract noun can modify the preceding clause, but not a concrete noun. I think "first bith" is a concrete noun and, so, it can not modify "rhinoceros was born" logically. whether a noun is concrete or abstract is the matter of our sense of logic. this is first error
the second error is that
"the first bith..." is insert between the main clause and "making it...". so, "making it..." modify the main clause by jumping. this case is not good. this is second error
"it" in "making it..." is unclear. this is third error.