lived a life of privilege.. Correct usage

A,D are out
C,B,E are left...
E- have redundant word'wealth'
B-is wordy...Again 'she' is used...So not required
C-correct


OA:C

Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting............i believe it should be life of privilege not in
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted............she is redundant
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting........correct answer
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time.........and is incorrectly used here
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted............and wealth is incorrect here

Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted

The correct idiom is a life of privilege and not life in privilege. Therefore, A and D are out.
B is essentially wrong because of the redundancy of 'while 'and 'simultaneously. While is not used to mark a contrast a there is no need for the contrast here. '
In E, the addition of wealth is not given in the original and hence is unnecessary. When we use 'while' as conjunction, we must put a subject also in order to ensure that the second is a clause rather than a second predicate. Otherwise, the structure will be unparallel with an IC on one side and predicate on the other side.
C is good, as it presents 'devoting' as a modifier modifying Jesse.
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IMO C;
lived a life of privilege while devoting

correct idiom usage



Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street [url]lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting[/url] her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted

MEANING
JS lived a life of privilege while devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the less fortunate.

A. "life in privilege" we need "of" not "in"; "while" and "at the same time" is redundant;
B. "while" and "simultaneously" is redundant; "devoted" wrong tense;
D. "life in privilege AND devoting" unintended;
E. life…AND wealth…" unintended; "while" and "at the same time" is redundant; "devoted" wrong tense;

Answer (C)

IMO: C
life in privilege: wrong eliminate A and D
B: Awkward Construction
E: Again awkward construction
Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted

Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

The sentence suggests that Jessie did two things(living and devoting) at the same time so those should be parallel. Looking at the options 'lived' is common to all and 'devoted' is parallel to 'lived'. Both B and E communicate clear meaning, B is the winner for E being redundant in using wealth along with privilege.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting - WRONG. Devoting is not parallel to lived.
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted - CORRECT. 'Simultaneously' is better than using 'at the same time'. Jessie Street lived and she lived are parallel to each other. Pronoun usage is correct.
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting - WRONG. Role of 'while' is ambiguous plus meaning is changed slightly.
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time - WRONG. Incorrect parallelism between lived and devoting.
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted - WRONG. Using privilege and wealth cause redundancy.

IMO Answer B.
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Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted

life of privilege is the correct idiom therefore A and D are wrong

among B, C and E

while + simultaneously is redundant therefore B is eliminated

between C&E

E creates a parallelism error and redundancy error privilege + wealth is redundant; and + while is unnecessary

therefore C is the correct option
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I chose C as the most concise one and the one, which follows idiomatic usage: A do X while doing Y (similar to: A do X as well as doing Y)


A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting - "while" and "at the same time" lead to redundancy
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted - same as with choice A: "while" conveys the same meaning as "simultaneously", so again - redundancy
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting - nice one, let's keep it
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time - parallelism issue, in this choice "devoting" without helping word acts as a modifier. And modifier is not parallel to a verb.
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted - proper usage in A do X while doING Y

C is the best

In my view, the right answer is option C.

Option A: Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.
The use of preposition in is inappropriate in option A. The right preposition should be of. We can, therefore, eliminate A.

Option B: Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines. This option is not concise. There is no point in introducing the word simultaneously after while.

Option C: Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life of privilege while devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines. This is correct and concise.

Option D: Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines. the preposition in is not appropriate. and devoting suggests parallelism. A scan through the sentence reveals there is no element that can be made parallel devoting, apart from the verb lived, and this is not right. Eliminate option D.

Option E: Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a lived a life of privilege and wealth while [i]at the same time[/i] devoted her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines. This wordy, there is no need to introduce the phrase at the same time.

Known as the Australian Eleanor Roosevelt, Jessie Street lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting her efforts to working for the rights of the disenfranchised, including workers, women, refugees, and Aborigines.

A. lived a life in privilege while at the same time devoting -- 'while' and 'at the same time' is redundant
B. lived a life of privilege while simultaneously she devoted -- simultaneously doesn't fit
C. lived a life of privilege while devoting
D. lived a life in privilege and devoting at the same time
E. lived a life of privilege and wealth while at the same time devoted -- 'while' and 'at the same time' is redundant

Therefore, C

Official Explanation

Correct Answer: C

The correct idiom is to live a life of privilege, so choices a and d are incorrect. Choice b is wordy (simultaneously repeats while and she is repeated unnecessarily), as is choice e (wealth is redundant with life of privilege).
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