@enkie, @KIRANR9P
Thanks!
Ok, I'll explain further. After hours of brainstorming, introspection and writing, a draft flowed out of my head yesterday. And I love it! It is perfect for me. It has feel. It has connect. It has resonance. It has style. It is me. It is truly inspired. And it is the essay I am sticking to and it is the essay adcom is going to see.
And it is 922 words.
But when my proofreaders read it, they asked - "but how did this event change you as a person", "why are there no before/ after scenarios", "you need to show that you changed perceptibly".
My counter is that the
entire essay is a reflection of my "increased maturity". The worldview I present in the essay is a result of the event and couldn't have come from a mind less impacted by it. I haven't forced anything into the essay, especially not a "why MBA". I love my essay the way it is.
I wish I could show you guys my essay! Haw!
But, that's the background. I don't understand the true "scope" of this question. Ok, without obviously telling me what your essays were about, could you tell me how far you went in terms of scope.