budablasta wrote:
@enkie, @KIRANR9P
Thanks!
Ok, I'll explain further. After hours of brainstorming, introspection and writing, a draft flowed out of my head yesterday. And I love it! It is perfect for me. It has feel. It has connect. It has resonance. It has style. It is me. It is truly inspired. And it is the essay I am sticking to and it is the essay adcom is going to see.
And it is 922 words.
But when my proofreaders read it, they asked - "but how did this event change you as a person", "why are there no before/ after scenarios", "you need to show that you changed perceptibly".
My counter is that the entire essay is a reflection of my "increased maturity". The worldview I present in the essay is a result of the event and couldn't have come from a mind less impacted by it. I haven't forced anything into the essay, especially not a "why MBA". I love my essay the way it is.
I wish I could show you guys my essay! Haw!
But, that's the background. I don't understand the true "scope" of this question. Ok, without obviously telling me what your essays were about, could you tell me how far you went in terms of scope.
Hi budablasta,
I had the very same problem and to be honest, I went back to revise my essay. I think a big part of this essay is to show how you grew and developed after the event or development. Now, as you say, you may have used the entire essay to point this out, but obviously your readers missed that fact. The question is, would you want to gamble and see if the Adcom catches it?
I'll use my essay as an example. Happy to share. I am an Arab and wrote about the Arab Spring last year and my outlook and thoughts of the region and how those have changed since the start of all the events in the region. But it could easily be for example a death of a family member or friend that makes you realize something, or a car accident, or even a tv program that you saw that inspired you to do something...
Am i right in this? @enkie, @KIRANR9P