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New post 15 May 2017, 10:51
You are wrong. It is a comma splice. Full sentence for your edification:

She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.

The splice occurs in the first clause that ends with "native Germany." Simply put, a comma splice is a fragment with two independent clauses connected by a comma. We have a crystal clear example here. The last independent clause is not a list despite the presence of "and," but rather an extension of the first thought with a new subject and verb.

Perhaps you should read your own book or rewrite it.

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New post 15 May 2017, 10:56
Hi mbaapp1234, if the entire sentence has three (or more) Independent clauses, then the first two Independent clauses will be most likely connected by a comma. But that doesn't make the sentence a comma splice.

For example, following is a correct sentence:

Peter plays football, his sister plays basketball, and his brother is into skating.

The presence of a comma after "football" does not make this a comma splice.
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She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany,
photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs
were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.

A. She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to
Illogical comparison. This sentence illogically compare Success of Lotte in NY with Native Germany.
However, the actual comparison is between success in NY and success in Germany

B. Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to
Same error as A.

C. Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in
Correct comparison !!

D. Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to
“when compared to” is unidiomatic …This usage means “only when the comparison is made she was less successful”
Also, the comparison is still illogical as it was in option A and B

E. She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in
Tense error “Jacobi’s stay is Germany was prior to her stay in NY ..so the part of the sentence describing her success in Germany shall have “had been”
And the part describing her stay in NY shall NOT have “had been” but a simple past tense.
Also, here two clauses are joined by a “,” . Totally Incorrect!!
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As we read the sentence, we figure out that the sentence presents a comparison of the success one person achieved in two different time periods. It says that:

‘she’ (some ‘she’ – we don’t have an antecedent till now) was less successful after she had emigrated to New York than she had been in her native Germany.
As you can see, while presenting the comparison, I’ve changed a couple of things.

‘compared to” to “than” – When we have less, more, or other -er words (better, smaller etc), we need ‘than’, instead of ‘compared to’ or other comparison structures, to follow these words.
‘compared to her native Germany’ to ‘than she had been in her native Germany’ – As is, the original sentence seems to compare ‘she’ with ‘her native Germany’. Clearly, not only the meaning is illogical but it also doesn’t seem to be the intended meaning.
Therefore, while explaining this part of the sentence, I’ve made the above two changes. It also means that these two are the errors that need to be corrected.

As we read further, we see that there’s another independent clause:

photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers
We have two independent clauses joined by a comma. This is the third error in the sentence.

In addition, since the first part of the sentence is an independent clause, it doesn’t make sense to use the pronoun ‘she’ in it and then introduce the antecedent in the second independent clause. If these two parts are to be presented as two independent clauses, then ideally, the noun should be used in the first independent clause and the pronoun in the second independent clause.
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She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.
Quote:
Meaning: She was less successful in New York than she was in her native Germany.
Contrast given by nevertheless: She earned a small group of discerning admirers.
her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.
Comparison: Is between success and not the cities.

Quote:
(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to
"Success after she emigrated" is being compared to "her native Germany"
Also comparison marker such as "less" needs "than" to compare.
A goes out.
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(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to
Comparison issue same as in answer option A.
Also comparison marker such as "less" needs "than" to compare.
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(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in
Comparison is perfect. "Less successful after she emigrated to New York" than "she had been in her native Germany"
Also "had been"(past perfect) clearly shows the sequence of events.
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(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to
Comparison issue similar as in answer option A.
Also comparison marker such as "less" needs "than" to compare.
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(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in
She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than inher native Germany becomes a complete IC. An IC can't be clubbed with another IC with a comma.
2. This sentence uses "had been" with New York, only to mess up the tense sequence. Success in New York comes later than success in her native Germany.
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concept -
1. we use past perfect to show complex sequencing
2. Being can be used as a Verb and a Noun
a. If it is to be used as a verb, then it has to be followed by a verb (basically some form of "to be"
b. If it is to be used as a noun, then Gerund
c. If it is used as a modifier, then it is WRONG.
3. As Compared to/with is WRONG
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She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.


(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to
(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to
(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in
(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to
(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in


Meaning of the sentence - she lived in Germany before and was unsuccessful in Germany. Then she moved to New York.
so "Had" will be used with Germany.. only option C has this

A - the word - had - is used with New York
B - Being here is used as a Modifier... which is wrong
D - past perfect was required over here
E - sequencing wrong

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Hello Everyone!

Let's tackle this question, one issue at a time, and narrow it down to the correct choice quickly! To start, here is the original question with any major differences between the options highlighted in orange:

She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.

(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to
(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to
(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in
(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to
(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in

After taking a quick glance over the options, here are a few things we can focus on to narrow down our choices:

1. She was / Being / Although / She had been (Structure & Conjunctions)
2. had emigrated / emigrated / emigrating (Verb Tense)
3. compared to / as compared to / than she had been in / when compared to / than in (Comparisons & Idioms)


Let's start with #1 on our list, because it will eliminate a couple options pretty quickly. The phrase that's underlined is meant to act as a modifier for the subject, photographer Lotte Jacobi. This means that the phrase needs to look like a modifier, and not a complete sentence. Let's see how each option handles this when you add the remainder of the sentence to it:

(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.
(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.
(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.
(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.
(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.

We can eliminate options A & E because the underlined phrases are complete sentences, and not modifiers like we need them to be! Both of these sentences are actually great examples of comma splices - two complete sentences separated only by a comma, which isn't good enough to separate them (they need a conjunction or semicolon instead).

Next, let's tackle #3 on our list: comparisons. Whenever we see comparative words, such as "less," "fewer," "more," etc., we know that we need to check for any problems with redundant or non-parallel comparisons! Let's take a closer look at each option and make sure the comparisons are handled properly:

(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to

This is INCORRECT because it's redundant. There is no need to say "as compared to" when we already have the word "less" indicating that we're comparing two things.

(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in

This is CORRECT! It makes more sense to say "X is less than Y" because it's clear and concise. It's also clear that the sentence compares Jacobi's success in New York to her success in Germany.

(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to

This is also INCORRECT because it's redundant. It also creates a non-parallel comparison! This phrase actually compares her success in New York to the country of Germany, which isn't parallel.


There you have it - option C is the correct choice! It's the only one that is clear, concise, and parallel!


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She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.



Hi,
Presence of "her native Germany" in the non underlined portion makes it clear that the entity being compared, Lotte Jacobi's success, must be from another place.
Lets pick the best of five:

(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany

(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to her native Germany

(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in : Absolutely correct

(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to her native Germany

(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in her native Germany
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(Subj) She (V) was (Mod) less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany, ... Lotte Jacobi nevertheless ... [did things].
-- Notice verb tense and comparison in the underline.

1. use of "compared to"
(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to her native Germany
(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to her native Germany
(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to her native Germany
-- compares the success she had to Germany. We are trying to compare her levels of success in the 2 countries.

2. Sentence structure, run on
(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in
-- there's a lack of a conjunction or something to distinguish between the two independent clauses in A and E

(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in
-- Dependent clause followed by independent clauses.
-- Correctly states the idea: she was less successful after she emigrated to NY when compared to before
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She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to[/u] her native Germany, photographer Lotte Jacobi nevertheless earned a small group of discerning admirers, and her photographs were eventually exhibited in prestigious galleries across the United States.

(A) She was less successful after she had emigrated to New York compared to Incorrect comparison, Incorrect choice of tenses, sequence of events doesn't match)

(B) Being less successful after she had emigrated to New York as compared to( same issue as in A)

(C) Less successful after she emigrated to New York than she had been in ( Correct comparison, correct use of tenses)

(D) Although she was less successful after emigrating to New York when compared to ( incorrect comparison between b/w NY & NG)

(E) She had been less successful after emigrating to New York than in( Incorrect choice of tenses, not the correct choice for sequence of events.)

Would go with choice C

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