GMATNinja wrote:
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(C) When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it.
I like the modifiers in this one, but the verb tenses don’t quite work. The word “when” suggests that two actions happened at the same time, but that’s not reflected in the verb tenses: “When the Declaration of Sentiments…
was adopted…, a call for female enfranchisement
had been included in it.” That doesn’t make sense: if we’re using “when”, the tenses would have to be the same. Eliminate (C).
First, "if we’re using “when”, the tenses would have to be the same." Are you sure? Don't we always say, "When we arrived at the theater, the movie had already begun." Is "when" prohibited in past perfect tense?
Second, in C. "When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848", isn't the sequence of action much better than E, after all the Declaration should be drafted first and adopted later? And hence, "When the Declaration ... drafted by ... was adopted at ..." sounds much more logical than the wording in E.
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