Concepts used:
less is used correctly
cause-effect markersadverb : severely
parallelism : when traveling <x> than when traveling <y>
comparison: <x> days than <y> days
participial modifiers: shortened days vs shortening days
participial modifiers imply who is doing (subject of action) vs who it was done to (object).
e.g. The man throwing the ball is my uncle. (The man is throwing at the time of mention - i.e. verb tense)
vs The man is using a punctured ball. (The ball is already punctured - but we don't know by whom, just that it is punctured).
shortened days - days that are shortened when people adapt to them
shortening days - days that are shortening when people adapt to them
- I won't go supper aggressive on this distinction, but it has a slight meaning change
Because the body adapts more readily to lengthened days than to shortening them is why most people experience less severe “jet lag” when traveling westward than when traveling eastward.
(A)
Because the body adapts more readily to
lengthened days than to
shortening them is
why most people experience
less severe “jet lag”
when traveling1. because <x> is why most people experience <y> (as opposed to saying - Most people experience <y> because <x>)
2.
lengthened is not parallel to
shortening3. people adapt to days that are shortening at the time of adaptation.
4. the body adapts less readily to shortening
them - confusing?
(B) The body adapts more readily to
lengthened days than to
shortened days, with the result that most people experience
less severe “jet lag”
when traveling(C)
Because the body adapts more readily to
lengthened days than to
shortened ones,
so most people experience “jet lag”
less severely when
they travel1. Because <x>, so <y> - redundant
2. severely (adverb) modifies experience (verb) -- something is off. e.g. I experience more severe pain (than before)
vs I experience pain more severely (than others do)
or I experience pain more severely (than anger).
(D) Because the body adapts more readily to
lengthening days than to
shortening them, most people experience
less severe “jet lag” when
they travel1. "they travel" not parallel
2. the body adapts less readily to shortening
them - confusing?
(E) The body adapts more readily to
lengthening days than to
shortening them,
so most people,
as a result, who experience “jet lag”
less severely when traveling1. fragment - most people, who <x> (missing verb)
2. the body adapts less readily to shortening
them - confusing?
3. so <noun>, as a result, <modifier> - multiple cause-effect markers with fragment sentence
4. severely (adverb) modifies experience (verb)