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The following appeared in a strategy memorandum of an investment company:
“Over the past several years, investment in precious metals, such as gold and silver, has proven to be one of the most profitable investment strategies for our firm. Over the next decade, the demand for these metals is expected to be strong, largely driven by the economic growth of large emerging markets--China, India, and Russia. Thus, our investors are best served by increasing their exposure to precious metals to take advantage of this unique profit-making opportunity.”
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's logic and analyze the argument's underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the argument's conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or what changes would make the argument more logically sound.
Answer:The argument states that investment in precious metals, such as gold and silver, has proven to be one of the most profitable investment strategies for the firm and since the demand for these metals is expected to be strong, largely driven by the economic growth of large emerging markets--China, India, and Russia, the investors will be best served by increasing their exposure to precious metals to take advantage of this unique profit-making opportunity. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing, and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that because precious metals have been the most profitable investment strategies in the past years, they will therefore continue to be profitable in the future. This statement is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. There could be other precious metals that will appeal to investors in the future and this particular investment that is now preferred by investors may not be preferred by them in the future. The author fails to clarify why the investment in precious metals is the most profitable investment strategy for the firm. The argument would have been much clearer if it explicitly gave examples of how investment in precious metals will continue to be favorable in the future.
Second, the argument claims that the economic growth of large emerging markets - China, India, and Russia will drive the demand for these metals for the next decade. It thus suggests that this is yet another reason why investors are best served by increasing their exposure to precious metals. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between the economic growth of large emerging markets to the demand for these metals. In fact, the argument does not even draw a parallel with the mentioned investment strategies to the demand for these metals, hence it did not demonstrate why an increase in demand for these metals will be an investment strategy that will be favored by the investors. If any such correlation had been shown for the investment strategy, which supposedly will continue to be adopted by the investors, then the author would have sounded a bit more convincing. In addition, if the argument provided evidence that the demand for these metals will be strong in the future and not just relying on the expected economic growth of large emerging markets, then the argument could have been strengthened even further.
Finally, the argument concludes that investors are best served by increasing their exposure to precious metals to take advantage of this unique profit-making opportunity. From this statement again, it is not clear at all how increasing the investors' exposure to precious metals will drive profit for the firm and thus be a unique profit-making opportunity. Without supporting evidence and examples from the argument as to how the exposure to these precious metals correlate to the investment in these precious metals, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantiative evidence. As a result, the conclusion has no legs to stand on.
In summary, the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all of the relevant facts in order to assess the merits of a certain situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.