According to United States census data,
while there was about one-third of mothers with young children working outside the home in 1975, in 2000, almost two-thirds of those mothers were employed outside the home.Issue:
ConstructionAnalysis:
1. The sentence presents two data points without trying to establish any causal relationship between them. Hence, the use of "while..", "even though..." and "with..." is incorrect.
2. Also, pay close attentions to various modifiers that changes the meaning of the sentence in one way or another.A. while there
was about one-third of mothers with young children working outside the home in 1975, in 2000, almost two-thirds of
those mothers were employed outside the home.
- "while" unnecessarily tries to establish relationship between two facts
- "was" does not agree with plural subject "mothers"
- "those mothers" nonsensically refers mothers in 1975 as against mothers with childrenB. there were about one-third of mothers with
young children who worked outside the home in 1975; in 2000, almost two-thirds of
those mothers were employed outside the home
- "those mothers" nonsensically refers mothers in 1975 as against mothers with children
- "young children who worked outside" incorrectly suggests that children were working outside rather than their mothersC. in 1975 about one-third of mothers with young children worked outside the home
; in 2000, almost two-thirds of such mothers
were employed outside the home
- Concise sentence with comparable structure; structure "in 1975, about 1/3rd mothers worked outside; in 2000, almost 2/3rd mothers were employed outside";
D. even though in 1975 there were about one-third of mothers with
young children who worked outside the home, almost two-thirds of such mothers were employed outside the home in 2000
- "even though" unnecessarily tries to establish relationship between two facts
- "young children who worked" incorrectly suggests that children were working outside rather than their mothersE. with about one-third of mothers with
young children working outside the home in 1975, almost two-thirds of such mothers were employed outside the home in 2000 answer
- "with" unnecessarily tries to establish relationship between two facts
- "young children working outside" incorrectly suggests that children were working outside rather than their mothersAnswer:
C.