Around the World in 80 Questions (Day 8): Spontaneous internal

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.
Correct. This is grammatically correct and most concise of them all

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.
Incorrect. This sentence is a bit more wordy and indirect.

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.
Incorrect. This sentence is passive and a bit awkward. It separates the risk from its causes

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.
Incorrect. This sentence is also a bit awkward. It uses "due to the fact of" which is unnecessary

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky.
This is grammatically correct but A is more concise + main point is towards the end here.

A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.
Correct
(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.
Incorrect use of ‘risk is because of ‘
(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.
Incorrect risk is presented and use of where

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.
Incorrect usage of due to the fact of ….are formed
(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky.
Incorrect usage of are and lengthy

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Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.
(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.
(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.
(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.
(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky.

Explanation:
(A) Changes the meaning implying that malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process whereas the sentence points out three reasons - spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies as the culprit during the post-heart transplant recovery process. OUT.
(B) It will be considerable risk and not considerably risk. OUT.
(C) Where is used to denote a place. OUT.
(D) fact of is unidiomatic. OUT.
(E) Correctly conveys the intended meaning. CORRECT.

ANSWER E

Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky.
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Understanding the intended meaning of the sentence is crucial to solve it.
Subject of the sentence is as follows :
Spontaneous internal bleeding -A
the formation of blood clots and malignancies - B
Main verb is ''present''
A and B present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process- Sentence has no significant grammar mistake and conveys precise meaning.

Let's proceed with process of elimination.

A - Keep A.
B - In the beginning of the sentence '' the reason..'' is redundant and sentence structure distorts the intended meaning of the sentence. B is out.
C - ''recovery process, where...'' - ''where'' is usually used to refer to a place. So, process is not a place. C is out.
D - '' due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed'' - It seems a run on sentence. Moreover, due to fact of is redundant.
E- ''Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are..'' S+V agreement is distorted. Subject of the sentence in this case is ''Spontaneous internal bleeding'' and the verb is '' are''. Incorrect. E is out.

A is our winner.
Hope it helps.

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.--- Correct and should be the answer.

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.--- Should be...presents a considerable risk not presents a considerably risk

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.--- The end of the sentence sounds incomplete.

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.---due to the fact of...are formed (both won't go together)

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky. ----- are what makes

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(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process. -CORRECT

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. -' The reason and because of' is redundant. ELIMINATE

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. -Use of where is wrong here, no place discussed in the whole sentence. ELIMINATE

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed. -Many issues in this sentence, first, use of 'due to' is wrong. second, parallelism is wrong. third, 'the fact of' is very rarely accepted by GMAT(GMAT considers this as bad construction)

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky. -SVA mismatch, note- 'along with' doesn't make subject plural. ELIMINATE


A

The correct answer is (E).

The sentence correctly identifies the three risks associated with post-heart transplant recovery: spontaneous internal bleeding, the formation of blood clots, and malignancies. The sentence also uses the conjunction "along with" to show that these risks are all related.

The other options are incorrect for the following reasons:

(A) is the most grammatically correct option, but it does not list all of the risks associated with post-heart transplant recovery.
(B) does list all of the risks, but it is not grammatically correct. The phrase "the reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk" is awkward and could be improved.
(C) is not grammatically correct. The phrase "A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process" should be "There is a considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process."
(D) is not grammatically correct. The phrase "The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed" is awkward and could be improved.

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process though the sentence is correct in beginning but with the usage of during the ... makes it whole verbose..

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. S-V disagreement the reason is singular subject and spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies is plural

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. again we have S-V disagreement ...

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed. to the fact of is wrong usage ...

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky. correct option....
along with.... are is S-V agreement and sentence is more concise and meaningful ...
OPTION E is correct

Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.

missing verb such as "are" and present need to be in "presented as" form

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.

reasons should be plural

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.

A considerable risk is presented sounds like risk is doing something

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.

"fact of" guarantee that it will happen

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky.

Correct

The Answer is A
Statement A is logical and one can understand the intended meaning of the sentence.
Statement B is wordy and awkward
Statement C is ungrammatical and alters the meaning of the sentence with wrong tense usage.
Statement D uses due to the fact of which is incorrect
Statement E alters the meaning of the sentence and is ungrammatical.

Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.


Concise and correct in meaning


Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process. is correct in Option A and conveys the original meaning.


Usage of where internal bleeding is spontaneous is verbose and incorrect


Usage of due to the fact of is incorrect
Usage of are formed is redundant.
Incorrect


Spontaneous internal bleeding should be followed by is and NOT are.
Incorrect

IMO A

I think the correct answer is A.

Reason to eliminate:
C. "Where? Changes the meaning.
D. "Due to the fact of" quite awkward.
E. The structure is awkard.

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process.

Correct as presented.

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.

The reason ... presents a considerable risk is illogical. Eliminate.

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.

where is used to modify places and not situations. Use of where is incorrect. Eliminate.

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed.

Incorrect parallelism, and illogical meaning. Also the use of due to is incorrect. Eliminate.

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky.

Incorrect subject verb agreement. Subject is bleeding; we cannot use are. Eliminate.

IMO A

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process. --> correct

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies.--> the reason and because of seems redundancy

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. --> wrong b/c use where to modify the recovery process

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed. --> due to must follow by noun

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky. --> wrong b/c subject is singular but verb is plural

The original sentence is grammatically correct, but it is a bit wordy. The phrase "Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies" is a bit long and indirect.

The best way to improve the sentence is to use the phrase "spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies." This phrase is more concise and clear, and it does not imply that the spontaneous internal bleeding is the only risk factor for the post-heart transplant recovery process.

The other answer choices are not as good as (E).

(A) is the same as the original sentence and is therefore wordy.
(B) is grammatically incorrect. The phrase "The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of" is a run-on sentence.
(C) is grammatically incorrect. The phrase "A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies" is a run-on sentence.
(D) is grammatically incorrect. The phrase "The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed" is a run-on sentence.

Therefore, the best answer is (E).

(A) is the original sentence, and it has some grammatical errors.
(B) is wordy and awkward.
(C) is missing the coordinating conjunction "and" between "internal bleeding" and "the formation of blood clots and malignancies."
(D) is missing the word "that" before "spontaneous internal bleeding."
Choice (E) is the most concise and grammatically correct. It also uses the coordinating conjunction "and" to join the three clauses, and it makes it clear that spontaneous internal bleeding, blood clots, and malignancies are all factors that contribute to the risk of the post-heart transplant recovery process.

Here is a breakdown of the sentence structure of choice (E):

Spontaneous internal bleeding is the subject of the sentence.
along with is a prepositional phrase that modifies the subject.
the formation of blood clots and malignancies is the object of the prepositional phrase.
are what make is the verb phrase.
the post-heart transplant recovery process risky is the direct object of the verb phrase

Break down of parallelism is as follows:
Spontaneous internal bleeding |
|and the formation of blood clots |
| and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process

(A) Spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies present considerable risk during the post-heart transplant recovery process. CORRECT.

(B) The reason the post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerably risk is because of spontaneous internal bleeding and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. The reason.....because of is wrong.---INCORRECT

(C) A considerable risk is presented during the post-heart transplant recovery process, where internal bleeding is spontaneous and the formation of blood clots and malignancies. 'where' is used to modify physical places. More over the where clause is incomplete and doesn't make any sense.-----INCORRECT

(D) The post-heart transplant recovery process presents a considerable risk due to the fact of spontaneous internal bleeding, and blood clots and malignancies are formed. Preposition 'to' must be followed by a noun, gerund or substantive clause.----INCORRECT

(E) Spontaneous internal bleeding, along with the formation of blood clots and malignancies, are what make the post-heart transplant recovery process risky. Here the subject is spontaneous internal bleading, which is singular and must have a singular verb. Use of 'are' is wrong. -----INCORRECT