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# Could someone please rate my Essay

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Joined: 30 Jan 2017
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18 Mar 2017, 12:05
ESSAY QUESTION:
The following appeared in The Homebuilder magazine, a local publication with a focus on construction and sale of real-estate properties:

“According to the most recent survey of our readers, nearly 70% of the respondents indicated that they are planning to build or purchase a new home over the next 2 years. These results indicate that the growth in the construction industry is likely to accelerate in the near future. Therefore, this industry continues to offer lucrative opportunities for investment.”

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's logic and analyze the argument's underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the argument's conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or what changes would make the argument more logically sound.

The argument states that the growth in the construction industry is likely to accelerate in the near future thus the construction industry continues to offer lucrative opportunities for investment. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it can be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.

First, the argument assumes that a higher percentage equals higher number. This is not necessarily true. For example, if we consider the total number of readers of the magazine to be 10, a 70% figure would mean 7 people responded positively to the survey. On the other hand, a number 1000 would give the number of respondents planning to buy a house as 700. We can not assume that a higher percentage means higher number. There is no evidence about the number of readers of the magazine. Clearly, the assumption is wrong. The argument could have been made stronger if it had explicitly stated the number of people reading the magazine.

Second, the argument does not provide the information about the background of the readers of the magazine. The background could mean the income of the households, area where they live etc. The argument assumes that the the people reading the magazine represents the full population of the area or country in the argument. This is again a leap of faith. For example, if the people reading the magazine are only the really rich people, then their wealth might be the reason they are buying homes. On the other hand, if the people reading the magazine are really poor, the response received in the magazine might just be a wishful thinking. However, if the argument had explicitly stated the background of the readers of the magazine, it could have been stronger.

Third, the argument fails to consider several other factors like socio-economic conditions of the country, current housing market situation etc. If people responded to a survey that they are planning to buy homes in near future, this does not mean that they are going to but it. Moreover, if the market conditions of the country in the argument is not so good, we might get the opposite results of what is stated in the argument. On the other hand, if the argument had mentioned the impact of such factors or had stated that we can assume that these factors will be the same in the next 2 years, the argument could have been stronger

Finally, considering all the key factors mentioned above, we could say that the argument fails to consider these factors and is weak and unsubstantiated. If the author had provided answers or explanations of these questions, the argument would have been more convincing. Without having reasonable responses to these questions, the argument is just a wishful thinking and a leap of faith.
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18 Mar 2017, 14:33
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Overall impression: 4.0
Generally, you are applying the 6.0 AWA template well. However, the essay is missing the obvious flaws in the argument and is using a limited vocabulary.

• Paragraph 1 and 2 criticize something that is not mentioned in the summary in the introduction.
• The criticisms in paragraph 2 and 3 are not the most obvious flaws in the argument. For example one could criticize the following low-hanging fruits:
• Readers of the Homebuilder magazine are very likely to plan to build a house, that is why they are reading the magazine.
• Just because a lot of readers plan to purchase a home in the next 2 years, this does not mean that the construction industry will grow. Maybe in previous years the number people who planned to buy a home was higher.

In the future, show your analytical skills and find the flaws in the argument. The length of the essay is good.

Please don't take my feedback for face value as I am still a learner. If this helped you feel free to give me +1 kudos.
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18 Mar 2017, 14:56
Someonelse wrote:
Overall impression: 4.0
Generally, you are applying the 6.0 AWA template well. However, the essay is missing the obvious flaws in the argument and is using a limited vocabulary.

• Paragraph 1 and 2 criticize something that is not mentioned in the summary in the introduction.
• The criticisms in paragraph 2 and 3 are not the most obvious flaws in the argument. For example one could criticize the following low-hanging fruits:
• Readers of the Homebuilder magazine are very likely to plan to build a house, that is why they are reading the magazine.
• Just because a lot of readers plan to purchase a home in the next 2 years, this does not mean that the construction industry will grow. Maybe in previous years the number people who planned to buy a home was higher.

In the future, show your analytical skills and find the flaws in the argument. The length of the essay is good.

Please don't take my feedback for face value as I am still a learner. If this helped you feel free to give me +1 kudos.

Thank you for taking the time out. You are right, I didn't pay much attention to the opening sentence about the magazine readers.
Also, now i realize that the essay is missing couple if imp flaws.

Kudos to you
Re: Could someone please rate my Essay &nbs [#permalink] 18 Mar 2017, 14:56
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