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"A recent survey commissioned by the market research department of XY Gen Stores indicated a high level of recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel sold in XY Gen Stores. However, the survey also indicated that approximately 60% of those surveyed that recognized the name of XY Gen Stores had never shopped at one of the company's stores. Because of this result, XY Gen Stores executives should launch a significant rebranding and marketing campaign to change the company's image and thereby bring new consumers into the stores.

The argument claims that XY Gen stores indicated a high level of recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel sold in XY Gen stores and because of this recognition XY gen stores plans to launch a significant rebranding and marketing campaign to change the company's image to attract new customers. Stated in this manner the argument fails to consider several key factors, on the basis of which the argument could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumption for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.

First, the argument states that a recent survey indicated high recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel of XY Gen stores. The survey further states these customers never shopped at any of the company's stores. If the customers are first time buyers, then there is a chance that the customers may like or dislike the products. In order to assess the argument, we need to have knowledge about the repeat purchases and how the company has been performing in the past years - Has the company's performance been consistent or has it been fluctuating with sales that are above average for few years and below average for other years. If the argument had provided relevant statistics and evidence, the argument would be much clearer


Second, the argument relates two unrelated facts high recognition among customers will lead to increase in sales. For example, A company might be well known and popular among customers but might not have repeat sales because of various factors such as price, customer service, low quality apparel etc. The argument provides no information about the market segment, whether the apparel is catered towards high-end users or budget customers. Without the above mentioned information, it is difficult to evaluate the argument.


Finally, the author concludes that a significant rebranding and market campaign to change the company's image will bring new customers into the stores. The author provides no information about the quality of the apparel and the target segment. He assumes high recognition will lead to high sales. In order to predict future sales, one needs to have full knowledge past and current sales performance of the company. without convincing evidence and relevant figures and statistics, one is left with the impression that the claim is based on wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. Hence, the conclusion has no legs to stand on

To conclude,the argument has several flaws it could be substantially strengthened if the author had mentioned all the relevant facts and provided relevant examples. In order to assess the merits of the situation, one needs to have full knowledge of all relevant facts.

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"A recent survey commissioned by the market research department of XY Gen Stores indicated a high level of recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel sold in XY Gen Stores. However, the survey also indicated that approximately 60% of those surveyed that recognized the name of XY Gen Stores had never shopped at one of the company's stores. Because of this result, XY Gen Stores executives should launch a significant rebranding and marketing campaign to change the company's image and thereby bring new consumers into the stores.

The argument claims that XY Gen stores indicated a high level of recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel sold in XY Gen stores and because of this recognition XY gen stores plans to launch a significant rebranding and marketing campaign to change the company's image to attract new customers. Stated in this manner the argument fails to consider several key factors, on the basis of which the argument could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumption for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.

First, the argument states that a recent survey indicated high recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel of XY Gen stores. The survey further states these customers never shopped at any of the company's stores. If the customers are first time buyers, then there is a chance that the customers may like or dislike the products. In order to assess the argument, we need to have knowledge about the repeat purchases and how the company has been performing in the past years - Has the company's performance been consistent or has it been fluctuating with sales that are above average for few years and below average for other years. If the argument had provided relevant statistics and evidence, the argument would be much clearer


Second, the argument relates two unrelated facts high recognition among customers will lead to increase in sales. For example, A company might be well known and popular among customers but might not have repeat sales because of various factors such as price, customer service, low quality apparel etc. The argument provides no information about the market segment, whether the apparel is catered towards high-end users or budget customers. Without the above mentioned information, it is difficult to evaluate the argument.


Finally, the author concludes that a significant rebranding and market campaign to change the company's image will bring new customers into the stores. The author provides no information about the quality of the apparel and the target segment. He assumes high recognition will lead to high sales. In order to predict future sales, one needs to have full knowledge past and current sales performance of the company. without convincing evidence and relevant figures and statistics, one is left with the impression that the claim is based on wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. Hence, the conclusion has no legs to stand on

To conclude,the argument has several flaws it could be substantially strengthened if the author had mentioned all the relevant facts and provided relevant examples. In order to assess the merits of the situation, one needs to have full knowledge of all relevant facts.


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This essay is well thought out, well organized and contains few grammatical errors. The only points that could be taken off are for style because each paragraph reads in a similar way - I believe this essay would receive a score of 5 out of 6 or higher.
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This essay is well thought out, well organized and contains few grammatical errors. The only points that could be taken off are for style because each paragraph reads in a similar way - I believe this essay would receive a score of 5 out of 6 or higher.


Dear Becky,

I was trying to gather more information about the scoring of the Analytical Writing Assessment. The only information available in the GMAT Handbook was as follows:
    Scoring: 0.0-6.0
    Each essay is scored at least twice, once by a human reader and once by a computer. The scores are all averaged to provide one section score, reported in intervals of 0.5.
Computer Score: c
Human Score: h
\(Reported Score = \frac{c+h}{2}\)

Could you please elaborate more on your scoring methodology and how you arrived at the score. e.g if I were to lay the following intervals for you. What in your opinion makes the essay fall in the intervals below ?

0.0 - 0.5
0.5 - 1.0
1.0 - 1.5
2.0 - 2.5
2.5 - 3.0
3.0 - 3.5
4.0 - 4.0
4.0 - 4.5
4.5 - 5.0
5.0 - 5.5
5.5 - 6.0

Thank you in advance.
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To conclude,the argument has several flaws it could be substantially strengthened if the author had mentioned all the relevant facts and provided relevant examples. In order to assess the merits of the situation, one needs to have full knowledge of all relevant facts.


I believe "it" should be replaced by "that"

An overdose of "relevant". I would recommend redoing this last bit
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To conclude,the argument has several flaws it could be substantially strengthened if the author had mentioned all the relevant facts and provided relevant examples. In order to assess the merits of the situation, one needs to have full knowledge of all relevant facts.


I believe "it" should be replaced by "that"

An overdose of "relevant". I would recommend redoing this last bit



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Could you please elaborate more on your scoring methodology and how you arrived at the score. e.g if I were to lay the following intervals for you. What in your opinion makes the essay fall in the intervals below ?

It's hard to give a precise score with these things--remember, the human and computer are cross-referenced specifically because human essay graders, even professionally trained ones, are not very reliable compared to the computer-adaptive algorithms of the quant and verbal sections.

That said, there are a few things to note. First, there are four general categories that most graders look for: your organization and structure, your mastery of the English language, the depth of your reasoning, and the strength and relevance of your supporting examples. However, it's not possible to say anything like "language is 25% of your grade," because your essay is graded on its overall effectiveness. An essay laden with typos would not get a high score, but it might do better than an essay whose logic was incomprehensible because the only typo was leaving out the word "not" from a key sentence.

Second, though the grading scales in .5 increments, 4.0 is the most important number. An essay that scores less than a 4 is "unsatisfactory," and can send warning signs to admissions officers that writing is a struggle. Higher scores are nice, especially aiming for an elite university, but admissions officers that Kaplan has spoken to have told us that 4 is an important break point.

I hope this helps to put your score in perspective, and keep up the good work!

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