AWA Score: 5.5 out of 6
Coherence and connectivity: 5/5
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.
Paragraph structure and formation: 4.5/5
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.
Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!
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Prompt:
The following appeared in a memorandum from the planning department of an electric power company.
"Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as those sold a decade ago. Also, new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating. Therefore, the total demand for electricity in our area will not increase — and may decline slightly. Since our three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years have always met our needs, construction of new generating plants will not be necessary."
Response:
The argument presented here claims that construction of new electricity generating plants are no more required due to several reasons like home owners are eager in conserving energy , then new home appliances are efficient in saving energy as compared to a 10 years ago and solar heating is also readily available. However this argument s incomplete and cannot be deemed solidly reasonable unless a few clarifications are reached.
One of the underlying assumption is that manufacturers are marketing many basic home appliances that are apparently saving twice as much energy as of those appliances that did a decade ago. Though these new energy saving machines are being advertised, the argument doesn’t provide statistics on how many people are actually opting for them as these may be a bit pricey and requires more attention also whether these machines are truly efficient. Moreover, argument fails to bring out a statistical report on how much percentage of population has actually bought such kind of energy efficient appliances and happy to use them. In order to bolster the claim author needs to provide more information about the efficiency of appliances, its pricing, maintenance strategy and people who are using it and how well these are working out for their needs.
Secondly, an alternative has been presented that home insulation and solar heating are available for home heating purposes. In this case, argument doesn’t provide enough information about what kind go region is this plan being proposed as solar energy cannot be harnessed and used everywhere. For instance, if it is located near some where in Antartica, then solar energy is not really an option people would look for. Hence to strengthen this, author needs to prove that region receives sufficient solar energy which is sufficient for generation power and in turn would help in home heating.
Thirdly, argument claims that total demand of the electricity will go down based on formerly mentioned reasons and the three power plants would be enough. Here, the author doesn’t take into consideration the growing population of the city. Predicting the future electricity consumption based on past twenty years might lead to discrepant results. Over the past twenty years the city might have seen so much growth and development, leading to many new upcoming business, industries which may be heavily dependent on electricity. Due to which the demands of electricity will exponentially grow and hence to support the claim the author needs to bring out the population number and the more information on the kind of growth the city has seen over the past years.
Lastly, given that we do not know answers to a lot of underlying questions, the argument cripples and is unreasonable to overthrow any kind of conclusions.