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With a 5.5 landing you in the 76% on todays test, I would assume that you'd be a 5+ on both essays. It is obvious that you have pretty good english, grammar, spelling, quick typing, and logical reasoning. I wouldn't spend to much time worrying about the AWA. I would definitely practice what you are already doing anytime you take a practice test, especially since this will help you with stamina (probably more important for you at this point). Good luck!

Anything above a 4.0 is considered good enough, and anything above 5 is considered solid. You should not have any trouble hitting a 5+ with similar essays.
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I assume that you read atleast each essay half before coming to analysis. :P Thankyou for the patience.

I hope it gives me a 5+, as there is not a single evaluation of AWA available to judge the essays.

P.S> I am far from being a native, never been to US of A, you see. :P
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The argument claims that the high costs incurred by the company due to its complementary customer services are hampering the profit margins of the company and that limiting the warranty cycle to two years can improve the company's profit margins. The conclusion is based on the premise that the current lifetime warranty scheme leads to high spending on the customer service long after the product has been sold . Also , the premiums paid to the customer service employees , who possess technical skill-set across varied products , are unreasonable as these the diverse product line also includes obsolete products .While , at first glance, the argument may seem to be compelling , upon closer introspection it becomes evident that the author's reasoning is based upon a number of unsubstantiated premises and unproven assumptions , rendering the argument weak and invalid.
The primary issue in the author's argument lies in the unsubstantiated premises. The author fails to provide any background information about the importance of lifetime warranty as a driving factor in consumer decision journey . What if most of the company's customers are loyal because of the lifetime warranty service feature. In this scenario, if the company restricts the validity of the warranty , there is a high probability that many of these customers may switch to other manufacturer , impacting the company's revenues and consequently the profits. In addition to this , no information has been provided about the services offered by the competitors in terms of warranty . Thus , the argument is open to alternate explanations and without further information , we cannot consider the argument sound.
The secondary issue in the author's argument is the unsupported assumptions that remain unproven throughout. The argument erroneously assumes that high spends on free customer service is the major factor impacting the financials of the company. There could also be a case where high production costs or high operating costs are a major contributor to low profits. In this scenario , even if we take into account the savings by limiting the warranty , profit margins are unlikely to improve. More information,in terms of numerical figures , could have been provided about the costs associated with the free customer service.The author also assumes that the premiums paid to the customer service employees for products that are no longer for sale is an unreasonable expense. This is a harsh assumption as the skill-set for the obsolete products may very well coincide with that needed to treat current product issues .
In sum , the argument is riddled with serious logical loopholes and is open to alternate explanations . If the argument wants to impact the readers , the author will have to largely restructure his claims , fix the flaws in his logic , clearly explicate the assumptions and provide evidentiary support for his premises . Without these changes , the argument is likely to convince few and remains unconvincing.


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The afore-mentioned argument states a conclusion that company that manufactures industrial equipment needs to limit their warranty to two years in order to improve their profit margins. This conclusion is backed up by the reasoning that they are currently paying too much on free customer service. And current lifetime warranty can lead to costs decades into a product’s life cycle. Also mentioning that the company pays their customer service employees a premium because they must possess expert skills across the entirety of their very diverse product line, including the products they no longer sell. At the first glance, the argument looks convincing, but at further analysis of the argument, a lot of gaps appear. These gaps are filled up with feeble evidences, weak claims and overreaching assumptions.
Firstly, the argument mentions that it is paying too much on free customer service which makes us think that there might be some focus and investment missing in the product which are getting damaged making the after sales services cost higher. Also, the argument does not mention how much is too much, mention of which would have made the argument look stronger.
Secondly, the states the manufacturers should provide a guarantee of 2 years instead. This statement assumes that the sales or the equipment won’t go down as a result. Also, it has without any market research has claimed it to be true. Had the author backed up such a claim with evidence or search results, it would have made the argument sound more convincing.

Thirdly, the customer service executives who are working as employees, might still get the salary which would incur costs to the company irrespective of their skills being utilised for the equipment repairs or not. The argument could have mentioned a plan here, saying that the customer service executives salary will incur less cost if they hire them on a need basis.

Moreover, the argument states that the need of the customer care executives is due to the long product cycle. Here the argument has assumed that the product will still be used by the customers even though the technology or new equipment has been introduced to the market. Had the author mentioned the assumption and acknowledged it in the argument, it would have made the argument much stronger.

Concludingly, the argument as is, is full of gaps, most obvious and blatant of which, have been discussed above. Had the author acknowledged the gaps and discussed those gaps in the argument, it would have made the argument look more convincing. Although, at the current state, one must conclude that the argument is full of assumptions and unsupported claims which makes the argument fall apart.
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AWA Score: 5 out of 6

Coherence and connectivity: 5/5
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 3/5
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!

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The afore-mentioned argument states a conclusion that company that manufactures industrial equipment needs to limit their warranty to two years in order to improve their profit margins. This conclusion is backed up by the reasoning that they are currently paying too much on free customer service. And current lifetime warranty can lead to costs decades into a product’s life cycle. Also mentioning that the company pays their customer service employees a premium because they must possess expert skills across the entirety of their very diverse product line, including the products they no longer sell. At the first glance, the argument looks convincing, but at further analysis of the argument, a lot of gaps appear. These gaps are filled up with feeble evidences, weak claims and overreaching assumptions.
Firstly, the argument mentions that it is paying too much on free customer service which makes us think that there might be some focus and investment missing in the product which are getting damaged making the after sales services cost higher. Also, the argument does not mention how much is too much, mention of which would have made the argument look stronger.
Secondly, the states the manufacturers should provide a guarantee of 2 years instead. This statement assumes that the sales or the equipment won’t go down as a result. Also, it has without any market research has claimed it to be true. Had the author backed up such a claim with evidence or search results, it would have made the argument sound more convincing.

Thirdly, the customer service executives who are working as employees, might still get the salary which would incur costs to the company irrespective of their skills being utilised for the equipment repairs or not. The argument could have mentioned a plan here, saying that the customer service executives salary will incur less cost if they hire them on a need basis.

Moreover, the argument states that the need of the customer care executives is due to the long product cycle. Here the argument has assumed that the product will still be used by the customers even though the technology or new equipment has been introduced to the market. Had the author mentioned the assumption and acknowledged it in the argument, it would have made the argument much stronger.

Concludingly, the argument as is, is full of gaps, most obvious and blatant of which, have been discussed above. Had the author acknowledged the gaps and discussed those gaps in the argument, it would have made the argument look more convincing. Although, at the current state, one must conclude that the argument is full of assumptions and unsupported claims which makes the argument fall apart.
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