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AWA Score: 5.5 - 6 out of 6!

Coherence and connectivity: 5/5
This rating corresponds to the flow of ideas and expressions from one paragraph to another. The effective use of connectives and coherence of assertive language in arguing for/against the argument is analyzed. This is deemed as one of the most important parameters.

Paragraph structure and formation: 5/5
The structure and division of the attempt into appropriate paragraphs are evaluated. To score well on this parameter, it is important to organize the attempt into paragraphs. Preferable to follow the convention of leaving a line blank at the end of each paragraph, to make the software aware of the structure of the essay.

Vocabulary and word expression: 4.5/5
This parameter rates the submitted essay on the range of relevant vocabulary possessed by the candidate basis the word and expression usage. There are no extra- points for bombastic word usage. Simple is the best form of suave!

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Hi, please help to grade my essay:

The argument claims that railway shipping is a more appropriate choice to deliver goods than truck shipping since railways invest more in their facilities than the highway which trucking used as main route to ship goods. Also trains consume less fuel than trucks, therefore they are more cost efficient and environmental friendly. The author readily assumes that the government should lower railroad company tax, since it is more appropriate mean of ground transportation than highway shipping. However, the argument fails to consider the limitation of railways transportation. Further, the argument does not assess the costs of maintaining and upgrading railways facilities. The argument relies on assumption that is not convincing and has no clear evidence to support the plan. Hence, the argument has some flaws.

First, the argument compares usage of railway transportation directly with usage of truck transportation. It is true that rail lines are exist and may be sufficient to commute. However, it omits the fact that railways transportation may does not built to transport good. Since the argument does not mention about how railways will deliver goods, one can assumes that it is built mostly for commuter rather than shipping goods. If the argument provided more information on comparing train’s current application and truck’s application, the conclusion could have been more convincing.

To be honest, as train is superior in terms of cost efficient and environmental friendly, the premise sounds persuasive. However, the author does not consider that costs of maintaining and upgrading the facilities for railway may be required more frequent than for roads for trucks. The claims that railways are more cost efficient will fail on the long term Therefore this breaks the plan that will reduce tax on railways company, because of more cost efficient.

In summary, the argument looks persuasive for the above-mentioned analysis. However, the argument could have been more strengthened, if the argument gives more concrete evidences. In order to fully understand the situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of train current application and nature of railway maintenance. Without further assessment, the argument is more of a vague opinion rather than substantiated conclusion. Hence, the conclusion remains open to debate.
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