OFFICIAL EXPLANATIONProject SC Butler: Sentence Correction (SC1)
THE PROMPTQuote:
According to recent genetic analyses comparing the genetic makeup of different types of berries, red berries have more total antioxidants than do non-red berries and less of an enzyme they think causes joint inflammation in humans.
• Meaning?
Genetic analyses of different types of berries found that:
1) Red berries contain more total antioxidants than non-red berries contain; and
2) Red berries contain less of a bad enzyme than non-red berries contain.
THE OPTIONSQuote:
A) red berries have more total antioxidants than do non-red berries and less of an enzyme they think causes
• fatal pronoun error: no antecedent at all for "they."
No logical antecedent exists for "they."
True, a few of the preceding nouns are plural, but
not one of them can think.
This instance is 100 percent fatal.
→ Pronoun ambiguity occurs when more than one noun can be a logical antecedent for the pronoun.
→ A "stranded" pronoun, on the other hand, occurs when the pronoun has no antecedent at all.
We have a stranded pronoun.
ELIMINATE A
Quote:
B) more antioxidants are found in red berries than non-red berries , and red berries have less of an enzyme thought to cause
• do not switch from passive ("antioxidants are found") to active voice ("red berries have") in the same sentence.
• if we must repeat the subject of the first clause to keep things clear, and that subject is attached to a verb, then we are facing a second independent clause.
When the conjunction
and joins two independent clauses, a comma must precede the word
and.
(The comma is the reader's signal that a new sentence is beginning.)
• absurd comparison - antioxidants are compared to non-red berries
This options means:
More antioxidants are found in red berries than non-red berries are found in red berries.This construction error is one of the most difficult to spot.
If you do not understand this concept, practice writing your own simple sentence to use as a template for those SC questions in which you
must assess the comparison.
→
Wrong: More gold is found in rivers than mines.
This sentence erroneously states that we find more gold in rivers than we find mines in rivers.
→
Correct: More gold is found in rivers than in mines.
Try to write your own little incorrect and correct sentences. Keep them short.
ELIMINATE B
Quote:
C) red berries have more total antioxidants than that of non-red berries and have less of an enzyme thought to cause
• the pronoun
that makes no sense.
→ LHS of comparison: Red berries have more antioxidants
than
→ RHS of comparison: [antioxidants] of non-red berries
Red berries have more antioxidants than antioxidants OF non-red berries?
To make this comparison parallel, we would need to say, "The total antioxidant level in red berries is higher than that in non-red berries."
See options A and D, both of which correctly use a verb to maintain comparison parallelism.
Options A and D correctly state that
Red berries have more antioxidants than non-red berries do. • this THAT is supposed to be a "copy" pronoun but fails because singular copy
that does not match plural referent
antioxidants.
→ we need:
... red berries have more total antioxidants than those in non-red berries . . .→ the words
that and
those can function as a
different copy [which sounds oxymoronic] of a noun.
When
that and
those serve this function, the pronouns must match whatever noun they are "making a copy of."
Can you replace the
that or
those with the exact same word each is copying? Yes? Then the usage is correct. [There are other problems in this sentence. This problem is by far the easiest basis upon which to eliminate.]
→
Correct: I like paintings by Matisse better than those by Renoir.→
I like paintings by Matisse better than [I like] paintings by Renoir.→
Correct: The customer service at Southwest Airlines is better than that at Delta Airlines.→
The customer service at Southwest Airlines is better than the customer service at Delta Airlines.• I would avoid the comparison verb issue.
If you can eliminate on a glaring and straightforward error, do so.
ELIMINATE C
Quote:
D) red berries have more total antioxidants than do non-red berries and less of an enzyme thought to cause
• I do not see any errors
Compared to Thing XYZ, thing ABC has more of one good thing and less of one bad thing.
• Is "than do non-red berries" awkward?
No.
The construction is somewhat formal, commonly used in high end publications, and reader friendly.
By "reader friendly," I mean that the placement of
do creates a correct comparison but does not interrupt the flow of "red berries have more of X .... and less of Y."
KEEP
Quote:
E) antioxidants are more in red berries than in non-red berries and less of their enzymes are thought to cause
• verb meaning is wrong
→ we can say that antioxidants are found in greater amounts in red berries than in non-red berries, but we cannot say that "antioxidants ARE MORE."
More is a comparative adjective here. It needs a noun. More what?
We could say, "Antioxidants are more plentiful in red berries than in non-red berries."
We could also say, "There are more antioxidants in red berries than in non-red berries."
In other words, to convey higher concentrations or levels of something, we do not say that they
are more.
•
their is ambiguous or without a logical antecedent.
Does
their refer
to antioxidants, non-red berries or to
red berries?
Logically,
their seems to refer to red berries.
Do not eliminate this answer on this basis on the first pass.
Use this possible hiccup as a tiebreaker if you need the latter.
ELIMINATE E
The answer is D.COMMENTSash124 ,
L0S3R ,
yasharoraa , and
DashingNightmare2 , welcome to SC Butler.
I am always glad to see people post; everyone else, don't be shy.
And what a great sample we have of posters from the slightly more seasoned Butler crew.
These answers range from very good to outstanding.
In fact, I see a lot of outstanding analysis.
Better yet, many of the approaches different from one another.
Big Hint: subsequent aspirants, read this whole thread.
You'll benefit from that 3-5 minutes.
Nice work. Stay safe, everyone.