SilverBull wrote:
tinni123 wrote:
App Submitted .. Fingers Crossed ..
Meanwhile Check out my Lifestory---- written , Composed , and sung by self .. My first OC
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2MRJ2BR8ChgRegards
This was alright. Didn't like the flickering. Couldn't focus and made me feel a bit sick. The subtitles also seem to have a few typos but maybe that was just my brain not being able to process the information properly due to, again, that flickering.
The black and white also gave it a dated look that I don't think makes much sense considering you, like most of us, are fairly young. It's just for flash and I think for such a short video substance should reign supreme.
You have a good voice, though.
The chapters were pretty "meh." Didn't find anything particularly distinctive. Sounds like what a lot of people, especially international applicants or immigrants, go through. Like AC/DC sang, it's a long way to the top if you want to rock 'n' roll.
Probably not what you wanted to hear but just being honest. Good luck.
Now I'm going to go back to karaoking Billy Joel.
I'm going to have to agree with the Bull here, the flickering was a bit much. Keeping with the AD/DC theme, You Shook me All Night Long should have been playing with the shaking going on.
That being said, I do think there are a lot of good things going on here. Structuring it like a song is unique and allows you to show the admissions team that you can sing and some other talents (always better to show rather than just tell). The theme of the entire essay seems to be overcoming hardship, perseverance, drive, etc. All good stuff, although it would have been good to see a variety of things. I'm sure you covered all of that in your other essays though.
This TOC essay is tough, I think you gave it a pretty good effort. It'll stand out for sure!